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Her Seven Veils
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Her Seven Veils |
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Sunshine
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Her Seven Veils He wondered how she might step at all With so many veils that trimmed her tall; Yet shift with grace she seemed to do As she sauntered into view Now its been said that some veils hold A treasure behind their silks of gold And some scant veils are little more Than entry ways men would murder for It seems a challenge hides behind veils Nuances of how a person’s mind sails Each veil a layer beyond whom we would know And this is what intrigued the stranger so. He looked through her to see which veil He might discard before she paled Borneo green veiled her eyes So first her trust he would realize He spoke to her then, soft, and low She leaned a bit forward, his words to know Then a flick undraped her Neptune ice blue The ground felt the silk, but still more to do Tibetan sun red flamed about her face She turned quickly yet her wrist he embraced For he would look past her soiled deeds Finding truth through the honesty of her needs She tried to escape, hide behind her Black veils She needed no man to tip her scales But with gentlest touch he reached in kind Slowly removing terror from her mind Treasured gold silk hung around her sleeve As he extracted bits o’er which she grieved For he would know the sheer depth of her As she clung to this veil ever sure He enticed her to come to join his walk He touched no more, he merely talked The woods would hold their whispers close The next move would be one she chose She turned to him and the Borneo green Veiled again her eyes, or so it seemed He gasped and saw that the Neptune ice blue Veil had come back into full view He wondered if the Tibetan sun red Would again enflame around her head Then she turned, and sat upon the grass Whispering, “Come, I’ll share my past.” So beneath the trees they lingered there She such a vision, he would not dare To interject but a breath, or two As she spoke softly, he felt night’s dew. Her words were of the silks she wore Of the veils that covered her, and more She allowed that her very depths would show For a pale ivory veil glistened just so Time slow passed, she had spent her words On this man’s heart so that he heard More than all the veils could hide, And still, he remained there by her side. Then time stood still, she spoke no more words Yet around her shape, her veils, reassured, Had drifted from her lithe, lean form Till but one veil left to keep her warm.  Draped round her soul, this veil seemed aching Deep iris sheltered a soul from breaking She seemed beggared by lost chance of fate She waited for something, was he too late? ‘Tis said that purple is the color royal Here her silk shifted, her last veil loyal For he would not remove from her All that held her fragility sure Although he could not help but feel The satin behind her veil surreal He reached out his hand, to know her skin Then she was gone, and the air was thin. Now over his mind, his own heart aching He knew why her shimmer had left him quaking If one more time he could capture a dream, He would wish to see eyes of Borneo green |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
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OH.... DAMN... all aspects of this precious lady friend are absolutely perfect...... perfect. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
The gifted story teller always hears this refrain...more please? Well done! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Yes indeed, this is a perfect story. I love it! IWIHWT  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
damn! AWESOME! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write! I don't think I will ever think of 'the dance of the seven veils' without remembering this piece! This has left me speechless! |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
simply awesome can you fly like a penguin |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
She turned quickly yet her wrist he embraced For he would look past her soiled deeds Finding truth through the honesty of her needs She tried to escape, hide behind her Black veils She needed no man to tip her scales But with gentlest touch he reached in kind Slowly removing terror from her mind Treasured gold silk hung around her sleeve As he extracted bits o’er which she grieved For he would know the sheer depth of her As I was reading this, I was thinking of how there are some rare people who don't just say they want to know us... they really do... so that even bare is possible.... whether our veils are physical or emotional. *S* You've written a wonderful tale... and colored my day with beauty... I thank you! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Karilee, you are a poetess with seven illustrious veils that reveal another aspect of your beautiful, poetic soul as each one is lifted through your poetry. As lovely as lovely gets...  Love & Sun-Light, Linda |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Beautiful Karilea !! "At one glance |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Oh, Karilea! This was such a stunning piece of writing and I savoured each and every verse. Take care........Sue I am in motion |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Wow. You are showing off now. I agree with all the above and add WOW!! I'm hooked on this one. JL |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW is right. Showing off is OK when you've got something like this to show.  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice write  |
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Fagin Member
since 2004-05-07
Posts 126Ca |
If one more time he could capture a dream, He would wish to see eyes of Borneo green Very well done Sis |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
something about veils when they are on the floor or over the chair that makes them so exotic as is this poem ms |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Amazing write!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
Your pen also contains silk. Very nice. If nothing is something |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A beautiful and exotic write Sunshinygirl  Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Salomé is dancing; Dropping veils raise the kings blood, And he is seduced... * Herod reaches to touch her, But she vanishes in air... Enjoyable read, it made the king in me sweat a little.... ___________ice/ford ><> |
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Spiros Zafiris Senior Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 982Canada |
..yess, magical words that sing.. sp ------------ |
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