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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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I know I have been relatively unvisited by Death- -has only blackened and curled the edges of my pages -has never bored through my middle with an all-cleansing flame but I think about that how I would react to such loss becoming comatose and gone or grieving and then finding strength or being stoic and blazing a lie between the clenched teeth of my eyes I know Death is there it just hasn't draped itself on me clinging and I fear it's effects on the still-living which is the only bad thing about Death Living |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
how true can you fly like a penguin |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
Death must be happy in the absence of life. How we have been so self-centered as to think only in terms of the contrary. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang awesome write, as usual |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
but I think about that how I would react to such loss becoming comatose and gone or grieving and then finding strength or being stoic and blazing a lie between the clenched teeth of my eyes I know Death is there it just hasn't draped itself on me clinging and I fear it's effects on the still-living An awesome write Brian Maree  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Brian...for one who has not hidden behind the draperies, you captured the various nuances of human emotion to the occurrence very well... very well...for it is all of that...and sometimes more, or less, depending on any given situation. Your powers of observation are ever clear... |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Wow!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"how I would react to such loss becoming comatose and gone or grieving and then finding strength or being stoic and blazing a lie between the clenched teeth of my eyes" nodding all of that, and then some, love sigh  |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I found this so haunting Bri. Even now, you manage to make word dance. (See how he sculpts it, people?) I swear your poetry is like a mobile, the way you construct it, and your instincts are always exacting. This one haunted me, because it wasn't too long ago that I could say the same, and I remember thinking these same thoughts. And when it finally did happen to me, (as sadly it does to us all) there was a very surreal moment when I thought "so this is how it feels". My, my, my m'bri... you are without a doubt, one of the most intriguing writers on these pages. You manage to examine without an emotional disconnect. *shaking my head* And I have studied you intimately, and you still amaze me.  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Brian, this drapes the mind and heart so completely. *sighing* I can't begin to pick out any single line, the whole thing touches deeply. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
gripping spill of words...couldn't take my eyes off the page for fear I would have to breathe... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Wow. Yes. That is the bad part. ...The painful, aching, devistating part. But you captured it's dimensions well. This goes in my library... Amazing... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Brian I've tried to think of a reply to this, but it brought about so many emotions in me, that I couldn't find the right words. When death touches you, I hope it is kind and a teacher.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know ... you can reherse that moment over and over but when it does comes, "death" sets its own stage, and the play becomes totally different. It is good to reherse, and you did it so well. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I've already told ya. But thought I say it again. (Well, it's better than that) |
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