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A Majestic Crane
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A Majestic Crane |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Shards of pain of isolate patterns vague veil you Its the wrong side of the moon tonight and silent shores regard you Even in the silent spring when naught but bleak and crackle chameleons hide, changing skins but never lose their shackles who shall hide their broken heart and pretend to have no pain? I am a vase with patterns vague but as well a Majestic crane *This was inspired by Professor Glooms consistant writing about old Chinese culture and a juvenile book called A Single Shard, by Linda Sue Park He is so fool who gives what he cannot keep to gain what he cannot lose - Jim Elliot |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Very insightful write CB... Especially liked the ending line...gave a good strong feel to the entire piece. TD |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Thank you - the book is a gem; about a young boy who desires to learn pottery from a master - who hides himself so well - anyway, it was inspiring; this poem makes much more sense after knowing the story |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
One of the best books about China and thougts I like is "The Joy of Chinese Cooking" by Doreen Yen Hung Feng". Ying and Yang will never be PC and certainly not acceptable in the US. Like the words dave |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Beautiful read. |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Thank you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I especially liked your reference to the patterns on a vase. This was thought provoking, and so very nicely done. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
there is great beauty in a solitary crane, great joy in watching it's dancing glide... even greater joy in finding there are wings within everything thank you, for this beautiful write |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
glad you got inspired! |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Copper B Cranes and Herons have always intrigued me, their grace and silent flight, is captivating.. You have captured that grace on this silent blue screen.. "I am a vase with patterns vague but as well a Majestic crane" and I am a man , crude as any but pretend, sometimes to be a majestic crane. very nice....very nice poem, indeed ____________ice/ford ><> |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
well written does your fire burn? can you hear me? ILL JUST KNOCK THIS WALL RIGHT DOWN |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
Thank you everyone - I think this is my favorite of the poems I've written - I appreciate your feedback Ice - you got me thinking - I think we're all like that - and as much as we may think we're pretending to be; I think we truly are sometimes |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write!  ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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