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Member Rara Avis
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0 posted 2004-10-22 05:21 AM

she sleeps.
Her roots, embedded
in this barren landscape.
Her mind
plays tricks on her
as each leaf, her children
fall to their deaths
crying in dissent
because in truth,
they all just need to be held.

© Copyright 2004 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2004-10-22 05:51 AM

Ohh ouch! I'm not sure if I felt like the one sleeping and confused here, or if I felt like one of the children, needing to be held. Either way this is a heart-wrenching, to the point, write. Amazing...
It'll be in my head all night. Probably all day too... sleep isn't looking very likely.
Hope things are well for you...

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

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Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving
2 posted 2004-10-22 05:54 AM

"because in truth,
they all just need to be held."

severed to the bone here.....*sigh*

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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2004-10-22 06:26 AM



Visibly impressed here!

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4 posted 2004-10-22 06:34 AM

your vision transform the page, girl...


**Intoxicant to the SouL**

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5 posted 2004-10-22 08:07 AM

so poignant Sue but so very well done....

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

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6 posted 2004-10-22 08:40 AM

so much spun on one little leaf, ya know?
who cries louder, mother or child?
hard to let go, hard to fly too.
very beautiful words from one who sees them too.

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7 posted 2004-10-22 08:42 AM

very dear and near...

this was magnificant prose..thank you

Member Rara Avis
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8 posted 2004-10-22 01:30 PM


exactly!  I feel the same way
Thank you

Thank you Dawn

Hey Kari, thanks for reading

Thanks Mari

Thank you so much Donna

Michele, yes and yes *smile*
thank you

Thank YOU Lee

Thanks guys

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9 posted 2004-10-22 02:15 PM



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10 posted 2004-10-22 04:28 PM

yes.. very nicely done ma'am....

very nice indeed...

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Member Rara Avis
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In Your Poetic Mind
11 posted 2004-10-22 05:14 PM

seee amazing......

Read between the lines
look deep into each word
and you will understand the
depth of my soul (GE)

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12 posted 2004-10-22 06:35 PM

the coming of age, it's wonderful isnt it?

one leaf at a time

Well said Sue


and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

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13 posted 2004-10-22 07:06 PM


This has real emotional impact...impressed here!  

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Realms of Light
14 posted 2004-10-22 07:12 PM

Well, I never looked at it that way before! I think I'll go hug a tree and make it feel better! ~ and me!

Your pen drips very poetic ink. Soulful Sue!

Love a tree and it will love you back!

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Moved from a shack to a barn
15 posted 2004-10-22 11:21 PM

Damn, Susie

This is VERY good...Not one word out of place..and not one word extra.

Impressed, yes!

passing shadows
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16 posted 2004-10-23 12:28 PM

missed reading you a lot
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the ass-end of space
17 posted 2004-10-23 04:25 AM

short on words, long on ache..awesome oh winged one
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18 posted 2004-10-23 09:45 AM

Does every tree weep for its leaves?
Do we all weep for lost children?

Very thought provoking write, Sue.  Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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19 posted 2004-10-23 09:54 PM

Eric, thank you so much

Ron  *smile* thank you, sir.

Yes, Lauren, I see *smile*

Thanks Maree, and goodness, well said yourself.

Wow! If you are impressed Martie, I must have done something right.  Thank you

aww Linda, exactly, I can see you out there getting strange looks from your neighbors hugging trees.  *smile*

*smile*  Thank you Eddie, you taught me how to tighten up my writing.

Thanks Dix, missed you too

Raph,  *smiling*  thanks . . . you know you taught me how to make it short and to the point.

Yes, Ken we do, thank you so much.

Thanks guys.

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20 posted 2004-10-31 10:04 AM

Hi littlewing. Mmm I love this. What a talent. I seen the duet you did with babygirl earlier...but it was a piece by you I wanted to bump I have chosen to make it this one. You have a remarkable talent my friend. I really am jealous that I did not write this. LOL! But at least I got to read it. BRAVO!

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21 posted 2004-11-01 04:50 PM

good read
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22 posted 2004-11-01 05:00 PM

Her offspring transformed ...she still reaches for Heaven, to be blessed anew.

This is so touching, dear Sue.

Love, Margherita

Member Rara Avis
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23 posted 2004-11-01 09:33 PM

Said it perfectly, my friend.


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walking the surreal
24 posted 2004-11-01 10:12 PM

Love this -


Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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woven by a poet's loom
25 posted 2004-11-02 12:14 PM

There are days when I would rather be a tree.
Interesting and enjoyable piece.


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my own state
26 posted 2004-11-02 02:28 AM

some leaves grow and others fall..
some leave home when independence calls...
poignant write...

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27 posted 2005-01-24 03:55 PM


just... wow...

so incredibly powerful...

Miss you, my sis...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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