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Simply Standing In The Rain
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Simply Standing In The Rain |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows 
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I stood out in the rain tonight, a hard rain, jungle rain blown off course, I must have needed brief discourse with gremlins in the sub-basements of my soul, I found myself counting time, between lightning and thunder no sense of wonder about why I stood out under the bleeding sky, as the storm ripped it asunder, closed my eyes to realize I was washed within a time warp standing still in hard warm rain pounding on my brain, I was anywhere but here and now; don't ask me how, sometimes it is a soft and gentle scent spalled within awareness that draws me hence, sometimes it is a violent storm called to rend my senses and my mind, to free some of my own bolts of lightning, stored away down with the gremlins and leftover pain, I guess against a rainy day; anyway, my soul called, my body went grabbed my mind, and all of us slipped through time again doesn't matter off to when, I was young again, freshly blooded, in a heavy jungle rain. ©2004 by icebox |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
icebox slanted time comes along from a small tap on shoulder from many different things, it seems. An experience that can be good, or not, depending on where and when. I hope your journey was a peaceful one. |
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lgina Member
since 2004-07-20
Posts 52 |
icebox, i to have stood in the jungle rain. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thank you very much for my late night snack from the Icebox. I very much enjoy your writing. Very fine lightening bolts and glad you penned 'em, my friend! We all have our gremlins but the rain can wash, yes. *wink* *smile* ...jo |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh that rain *sigh* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I never understood why people run to get out of the rain...I love it. affirmation!  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This conveys a lot. Especially in the down pour.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"anyway, my soul called, my body went grabbed my mind, and all of us slipped through time again doesn't matter off to when, I was young again, freshly blooded, in a heavy jungle rain." I so very much enjoyed this... Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
rain is life we are the rain too afterall |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Simply? Doesn't sound like it. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Kraw is on to something... is it ever simply..? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Well, now we have proof you're not a turkey....they look up trying to see where those drops are coming from....and drown. The gremlin thing? Aye, I've fought 'em and I've had long talks with 'em. Learned from both, but never figured out which I preferred. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
"my soul called, my body went grabbed my mind, and all of us slipped through time again" I love it when that happens...usually... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
hmm...enjoyed that...the sound of it..the way it flowed..the words... hugs, g "Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This made me sigh, me thinks I'll do the same when our next storm hits downunder, a cleansing of my aura may do me good....as did reading your poem Enjoyed. Maree cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
enjoyed the read - you are inspirational in your writing I can learn much! Roniece Dawson-Bruce |
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jennirey Member
since 2002-01-24
Posts 198North Richland HillsTx |
Before reading this I add, that I too found myself wandering in a drizzle of sorts tonight. It felt good, I kept walking then half way out the rain became hard and fierce and cold. Glad you had a good walk and talk with yours. I think I merely got wet. jennirey |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
IceBox~ 'the sub-basements of my soul' Oh my ... is that rich imagery~ I found that I enjoyed the little nuance internal mind-rhymes that I found in this~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
liked this |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I really enjoyed the subject matter here and also the sound of it, the internal rhyme. Very well done. Liz |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
wonderfully rhythmic--I felt the pelting of the rain...'cept I got to stay dry and think about the why? you asked yet standing in the rain is often exactly what we need, isn't it! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I can't pinpoint exactly why, but I just loved reading this Thanks for the read ^_^and then He created the horse... |
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