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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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broken toe statues of soccer mom's tying shoes on little boys with fast car dreams they have viagra in their eyes and novocain smiles can hear the texture there of their tongues on teeth when they swim their spoons in some africa with cardboard cups dressed up as trees and dragonflys red curbs are for parking grays are for pidgin speak and seagull sequels and the parking lot pies are machine gun dialogues between wanna be drummed hummers _________________ Dark |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You probably won't believe what floated in my imagination as I swam through this... ever extraordinary, you are... |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
How often shall I tell you how fascinating I find your words and the metaphors you use. The feel of your work, the way you word life, it is intriguing and I enjoy your unique perspective. This is no exception-  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
amazing, the visuals you create while reading, one thing jumped out at me...the dragonfly. Have you seen that movie..."Dragonfly"? If not you should, a must see... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Ms sunshine...what floated in your mind..hmmmmmmmm the little radio controled CrisCraft boats on the pond at the park? Thanks to you ms _______________ Ms Susan, friend doka, arrigoto for your eye touch songs in reply _____________ Ms LeeJ, have not seen the movie, but dragonflys are special, perhaps I will soon, thanks for the read and review and for calling me banana (grin) |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Actually nothing as serene as Criss Crafts... but more of a floating of ages between young boys and old men, then back again, and the women who would care for them through all ages... and lots of color... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
...smiling at your images in my mind's eye... |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Hey D! Your Pacifica is a language all to its own. Could feel how the edges of the concrete jungle made cliffside worthy of jumping, or at least looking at through your vision. As long as you're there. Love, Reg |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
neat write |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
yes, a banana unsplit delicious imagery  but LOL at the hummers |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger "So what's a meta for?" LOL |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh for the love of... Someone send me the cliff notes??? DS~ I love your stuff...but honestly, I don't understand this one!  Help me? |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
DS Like film clips fast forward, stop, rewind....you draw this like an art...and I'll bet it only took you a few minutes...and lots of looking deeply at things.  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
they have viagra in their eyes and novocain smiles can hear the texture there of their tongues on teeth beware when the soccermom goes wild........ |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
I think the Inked One understands this one. I got the same message. Your poems are puzzles with surprises. But there ain't no bananas. Dragonfly is a great movie, by the way. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
gang...mall thirty at the pacific view where the soccer moms yack and stack starbucks and the latest oprah...and get a bit rowdy when they wrestle over a parking place for the bigbuckmobiles..... just a snapshot...and thanks to you all for the reads and replies to my scribbles |
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