Open Poetry #33 |
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an evening with you |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal ![]() |
the music flowed in blue hues of country grass banjos strumming bows flying across fiddle strings the twang of voices harmonizing setting my blood to dance in my veins the smell of air fresh on the farm the tumble of children laughing rolling across the fields the kiss of the golden sun setting alighting the earth in amber glow and there was you friends and strangers intermingled meeting in strains of congeniality stories shared of the old days and old ways while tossing back a couple of beers and dining upon pot luck presents and there was you pretending the cowboy by hay bale roping cracking the whip at the speed of sound watching the girls chase little men the crescent of moon rising the scent of evening enveloping and there was you lanterns now lit and hanging stars littering velvet skies as diamonds look, Cassiopeia and the Big Dipper folk start folding up blankets and chairs riding in hay wagon exodus but still there was you the lighting of the fire warmed chill of night hushed voices now drifted in gentle conversation the crackle and pop of flames now serenaded and the blood danced within my veins sitting there next to you s.a.t. Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
the music flowed in blue hues of country grass banjos strumming bows flying across fiddle strings the twang of voices harmonizing setting my blood to dance in my veins Each and every line was so descriptive and flowed, as the entire poem, but this opening paragraph took the reader off to your world and you could hear thos banjos...a happy poem...filled with love. Wonderfully penned |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
thank you LeeJ, I appreciate these kind words. it was a most wonderful evening. ![]() Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
A magical time, described masterfully. Love, Margherita ![]() |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Vivid experience through your words. Wonderful write. JL ![]() |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Susan, this brought back such fond memories of me as a teenager with my boyfriend at 4-H campfire. Much enjoyed the colors and sounds I heard in this one. Hope the tournament went well! ![]() |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow! what a night! what a scene! ...and what memories it brought back *sigh* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Susan Sounds wonderful....like wanting to be there! |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
Geez... YOU HAVE GOT TALENT!!!!!! It seems almost effortless to you. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I must have been there as well ~ 'cause it sure as chickens, I mean "dickens", feels as tho' I had been! You really created a fine mood with your superb writing! So vivid! So emotive! So gall darn convincing! Very well done, Susan! ![]() Linda |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you all my dear friends. Indeed, sometimes it is easy to write when the magic of the night, the emotion of simply being, floods through and runs as words upon paper. I do so appreciate you all letting me know how this touched you and I appreciate all the encouragement. Hugs to all ![]() Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Susan, should I comment...when so many accolades have been given? Should I even write a word, when so much is said of you, the poetess? Darn right I should!!!! This is an awesome poem, so easy to visualize...the romance certainly filled the night air....very nicely done....And you went and played with knives????? If you are as good with "knives" as you are with your pen, well....you know what I am trying to say.... Great write!!! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Barry, my dearest Sir, your reply warms my heart, thank you. Yes, I love to play with knives, big and small, firearms, sticks, etc. I just received my basic instructorship in combat arnis this weekend. This is very exciting. The branch of MA is actually more based upon actual street combat, ie. surviving close range attack, than it is on the art such as would be karate or judo, it uses techniques from many arts blended with the Filipino art of Arnis (which uses tools such as blades and sticks). Today we dodged bullets, okay, soft air pistol, but still, I was not hit once and nailed the instructor (who played the bad guy) in the head six out of seven times. It was very exciting. Thanks again. ![]() Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
remind me to never challenge her to a duel with pistols at 20 paces..... You are welcome "Ma'am" (out of respect, reverence, fear..).... Just kidding!! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Barry, ![]() S Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...the title..."And There Was You" is all over this...James |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
what wonderful images you portrayed with words .... the night sounded truly magical Hope |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
James and Hope, thank you most kindly ![]() Susan |
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MGROVES![]() ![]()
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow! thanks for the night out.needed it. pictured this quite well, an excellant writting :luvya: |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
MGROVES -- thank you kindly, glad you enjoyed. ![]() Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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