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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2004-07-26 07:18 PM

“Drops puzzled the window
Into fractured bit of view
Not quite
gathered into the whole just left a
Distorted haze of impressionism
I chose to ignore
And instead traced an absent line
Where the white of where strap was
Met the browner tones of pale
Unexposed
                       As it was to the sun and sight
Till I began to write
Words on your skin “

Old leather journals draw mold
   And I can only remember then… such days as began
And ended in soft scribblings on off white sheets

Yet when it rains still
I think of how the expanse of soul bared to me
Along with the pleasures tasted
                                                    Have left me here
To ponder
                     The yearn inside for more
Than just the surface scratched world
Day to dayed inside

I turned a page

“More than once indeed I have felt
the movement of that inside
which some might say is soul
other heart, still I feel there is something missing
and I wander on to the next hope
wanting to be sure another feels the same
understand the game…. The way life tricks you
the way fools love
                                        blindly”

And I notice it has grown darker still
As clouds tumble in will of nill
On winds heading someplace far from here

But for now
                        I close again my mind and words
Wrap oilskin tightly back in place
All the while wondering why I keep such things
That show the stains
                       and failings
of speaking in terms of

I

Startime55
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since 2003-04-05

Posts 2148
Alberta, Canada

1 posted 2004-07-26 07:33 PM

True ponderings as raindrops fill clear glass that opens a window of the heart...Beautifully written...a joy to read...

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2004-07-26 07:40 PM

And I notice it has grown darker still
As clouds tumble in will of nill
On winds heading someplace far from here

But for now

~*~

For now I know there will be more...

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

3 posted 2004-07-26 07:41 PM

"Old leather journals draw mold
   And I can only remember then… such days as began
And ended in soft scribblings on off white sheets

Yet when it rains still
I think of how the expanse of soul bared to me
Along with the pleasures tasted
                                                    Have left me here
To ponder"

and

"And I notice it has grown darker still
As clouds tumble in will of nill
On winds heading someplace far from here

But for now
                        I close again my mind and words
Wrap oilskin tightly back in place
All the while wondering why I keep such things
That show the stains
                       and failings
of speaking in terms of

I"

Absolutely an amazing write Ron.  The word pieces falling into place effortlessly, as they often do when you hit that vein within.  Enjoyed as always bud...

Tiersdin
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since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

4 posted 2004-07-26 09:38 PM

But for now
I close again my mind and words
Wrap oilskin tightly back in place
All the while wondering why I keep such things
That show the stains
and failings
of speaking in terms of

I"

straight to the heart, Captain.

~tier

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-07-26 09:41 PM

Thank you for this Captain...
As always...excellent.
Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
Dancing with you in the summer rain ~

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

6 posted 2004-07-26 09:43 PM

*sighing* oh, to be that oilskin

what a gorgeous write!

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2004-07-26 09:46 PM

Ron

"But for now
I close again my mind and words"

I know you cannot do this for long, the journal continues inside, my friend..and your words are always gold to me.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-07-27 03:44 AM

you are a river of life

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

9 posted 2004-07-27 04:22 AM

“More than once indeed I have felt
the movement of that inside
which some might say is soul
other heart, still I feel there is something missing
and I wander on to the next hope
wanting to be sure another feels the same
understand the game…. The way life tricks you
the way fools love
blindly”

Ditto. Very impressive ponderings.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

miscellanea
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since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

10 posted 2004-07-27 05:32 AM

Cpat,
   My favorite type of poetry is far from romance, however, you write it sooo honestly and wonderfully, how can I avoid reading it?

                  Enjoyed, as usual.
                  miscellanea

muted

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since 2004-01-15

Posts 2949
Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving

11 posted 2004-07-27 06:44 AM

impressionism
..sort of what love is...if you stand way back..you can see this full glorious picture,,,,but up close...its just a bunch of dots (and dots sometimes can be hard to decipher)LOL

i find i appreciate love more when i have the space to step back and enjoy it from a distance.

and as always, ive enjoyed reading YOU

1slick_lady
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since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

12 posted 2004-07-27 08:03 AM

and split beyond these shards of glass
lies a prism scattered from mistakes
gathered closely together upon the face
that shows the light and the dimmer side
clear pain broken in un-silvered mirror
where tucked in a facet could be diamond

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

13 posted 2004-07-27 08:12 AM

“More than once indeed I have felt
the movement of that inside
which some might say is soul
other heart, still I feel there is something missing
and I wander on to the next hope
wanting to be sure another feels the same
understand the game…. The way life tricks you
the way fools love
blindly”

Is it blindly? Or is it, actually your tender soul feeling something that was never there before? I can't help but ponder that myself...Ron, this was richly filled with wonder, discovery, questions and life's circle

Beautifully done.

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

14 posted 2004-07-27 09:45 AM

I really enjoyed this

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

15 posted 2004-07-27 11:22 AM

Till I began to write
Words on your skin “
=========================

just as long as you write them........
please dont ever stop.

I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding.

~Fluent~
John O'Donohue

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2004-07-29 04:13 PM

And instead traced an absent line
Where the white of where strap was
Met the browner tones of pale
Unexposed
As it was to the sun and sight
Till I began to write
Words on your skin

There aren't many times I'm jealous of another poet's words... but this is one of those times. *S* I wanta write like this!!! *howl!*

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

17 posted 2004-07-29 04:20 PM

love it all, Cpat, but especially :

“More than once indeed I have felt
                          the movement of that inside
                          which some might say is soul
                          other heart, still I feel there is something missing
                          and I wander on to the next hope
                          wanting to be sure another feels the same
                          understand the game…. The way life tricks you
                          the way fools love
                                                                  blindly”

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

Posts 3802
california

18 posted 2006-08-22 03:07 AM

speachless again

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

Artic Wind
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since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

19 posted 2007-10-27 05:47 PM

beyond words

ARCTIC WIND

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