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Where Now, When Home?
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Where Now, When Home? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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Where Now, When Home? ©2004 C.G. Ward if they grazed on silence, would the loss sustain? is life in the battle-dole enough to sieve protein from a canteen born(e) the distance of maturity? and when the moon shines crimson skies over a desperate desert night, summer shall be defiled – like a girl-child, robin-hooded (un-maiden); castrated in the month of sprung. for solace has yet to equal solidarity while the solidity of solitude continues to murder the undead soldier. -----//----- for he marches this spring, bound for the glory of dust and fear and searing enmity. who will shelter this boy, while his mother tests her tears? forlorn, - a civilization away - studying a map bedecked with colorful pins, each denoting where he was... a month in the past, a past in the month. she wonders: “where now & when... home?” |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hopefully soon, Christopher....hopefully soon. Excellent writing  If you can read this, thank a teacher. If you can read it in English, thank a soldier. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I don't know why you don't write more...but I really like it when you do...just wish for more I guess |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
hello Christopher, I choose to leave a warm and fuzzy comment, simply b/c I could not critique your poems...they are exclusively a welcomed read and work of art... Best wishes sent along for a great day Lee J. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Mind If I echo the above? yeah creative huh? If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
if they grazed on silence, would the loss sustain? is life in the battle-dole enough to sieve protein from a canteen born(e) the distance of maturity? and when the moon shines crimson skies over a desperate desert night, summer shall be defiled – =============================== thank you...thank you...thank you   if they grazed on silence, would the loss sustain? oh man... that line rocks... deep deep deep ... yes.. you are. I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
forlorn, - a civilization away - studying a map bedecked with colorful pins, each denoting where he was... a month in the past, a past in the month. she wonders: “where now & when... home?” these are ~sighing~ words M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"grazing on silence"... I'm swallowing a lump in my throat with this write, Chris. And push pins plotting the course brings the scene into heart tugging sharp focus. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm not sure if I "got" it--but it made me think of my nephew, now stationed in Afghanistan. He doesn't feel like a hero burning down poppy fields as he understands he just destroyed a family business too. He wants to come home too, and nobody will ever understand what he is feeling right now, so he just says he's fine, but homesick. Thanks for this one C. Even if I'm off on the interpretation, it resonated that yearning of "home" that is an invisable thread of longing strung halfway cross the world. Come home, Nick. Thanks again Christopher. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Christopher A very sensitive touch you have! |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Good one! Enjoyed. JL  She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Chistopher, This would be a great poem for submittal to the Poets Against the War web site. http://www.poetsagainstthewar.org/ You tell it well, without being telly. Corinne |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Christopher, I am in awe of how you poetically created this. It is so very deep, but still, it becomes one with the reader. Very much enjoyed your work and thoughts. misc'e |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"forlorn, - a civilization away - studying a map bedecked with colorful pins, each denoting where he was... a month in the past, a past in the month. she wonders: “where now & when... home?”" Kissy Face.... this truly touches.....  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Hey C...I'll be back tomorrow when I've thought of something clever to say.  |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
“who will shelter this boy, while his mother tests her tears?” “a month in the past, a past in the month.” This is excellent Christopher. This poem flows beautifully and forms a wonderful piece that I am simply in awe of. I found myself reading this several times. Each stanza uniquely carries it’s own weight and could be read individually with it’s own distinct poignant message and depth. An amazing read. It just gripped me Chris … really well done indeed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Excellent portrayal of every woman's wonder. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Tequilia_Sunrise Senior Member
since 2003-02-19
Posts 612Lochalsh, Ontario, Canada |
Beautifull |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
just wanted to say a quick thank you to everyone who replied. it's much appreciated. C |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"forlorn, - a civilization away - studying a map bedecked with colorful pins, each denoting where he was... a month in the past, a past in the month. she wonders: “where now & when... home?”" Sorry it took me so long to get back here C but this one deserved more thought than I had time to give it until now. I hope you'll check out the link Corinne suggested. This piece, I think, would be appreciated by many. I don't say this often but I truly wish I'd written this. Nice job C... |
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Red Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 143Ca |
Always a pleasure to read your words. To say that you write well would be an understatement. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This is a very intense poem. Excellent. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Not much more I can add. Outstanding.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
for he marches this spring, bound for the glory of dust and fear and searing enmity. who will shelter this boy, while his mother tests her tears? forlorn, - a civilization away - studying a map bedecked with colorful pins, each denoting where he was... a month in the past, a past in the month. she wonders: “where now & when... home?” You seldom speak (LOL... let me rephrase that... you seldom post in open *G*)... but when you do... We read poetry. *S* Excellent!! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Hey Dear Friend, It's nice to see your face (well your words anyhow) again. When Home? The sad truth is that far too many moms, dads, brothers, sisters, friends, and relatives are having to ask this very question.I can't think of a better poet to have stated this obvious fact in such a heart gripping way. Well done! By the way, did I mention I liked it? ~ Ruth |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
made me come look for you...like this.. love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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