Open Poetry #33 |
Waiting in Silence |
Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Where do I turn Left here alone Knowing now what I know? What once was merely a breath Has been caught on the wind And now whispers in seductive tones. Like the call of cascading water Awash across stone Swift and elusive, but still it is there I hear the longing for answer To discard the cover of silence And put to voice what has been denied sound I feel like crying out Pleading from the rooftops Can you not hear my soul yell? But I am here Left alone in the silence Listening to its resonant roar s.a.t. Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
What once was merely a breath Has been caught on the wind And now whispers in seductive tones. Like the call of cascading water Awash across stone Swift and elusive, but still it is there I hear the longing for answer To discard the cover of silence And put to voice what has been denied sound ================================== this is a bittersweet beauty... hauntingly lovely. I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Oh, Susan, you do show us so much of you. this was a beautiful poem, full of emotion and longing.....very expressive. ....jo |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Perhaps too much, jo? Ah, but I am a soul that needs to be expressed. Though oft times I walk outside of my shoes, there is always a bit of ourselves in the imprints left, no? And at others, it is our hearts tread left for the reading. Thanks for your warm hearted acceptance, it means a great deal to me. Janet Marie, thank you for your reply. I like your description, it definitely defines the mood. Hugs to you both Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Such a plaintive voice echoing. Well done. "May we one day look to the needs of those bleeding on our own streets before shedding blood on others." This is a great line you left on my Woman in White House. Thank you. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
James -- Thank you. Ken, I appreciate the reply and the compliment. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
that silence... I can feel the ache within it. You express it so well in this. misc'e |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I know the silence |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you misc'e-- P.S., yes, I know that you do. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
This so poignantly soft and beautiful. Listen to the silennce...as melville said..."Silence is the only voice of God." Love, Eric |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Susan~ Oh my gawd ... this is LOVELY !!! What delicate word-touch you put to the page~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
stirs the senses with vivid and tactile imaging...and silence can be an horrendous roar, but oh, so lovely, when it finally tapers to a peaceful quietness Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
But I am here Left alone in the silence Listening to its resonant roar Beautifully said! Love, Margherita |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Bittersweet write Susan... Very much enjoyed. Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Like the call of cascading water Awash across stone Swift and elusive, but still it is there ~*~ |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you so much my dear friends. Your kindness warms me. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"I feel like crying out Pleading from the rooftops Can you not hear my soul yell?" Very well done. "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you Susan C- susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
The white noise of alone. Perfectly expressed poetess. That's when we need new tunes...new vibes...to soothe us back into song. Sincerely, Reg |
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Snowflake From Hell Senior Member
since 2003-07-10
Posts 777My own little Icey Oblivion |
really enjoyed this Victims....aren't we all? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Reg, the white noise of alone, I like that. Nails it on the head. Thanks for your reply. I'm happy you enjoyed this, oh snowy one. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Never too much, Susan, for your soul is beautiful. ....jo |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
"Left alone in the silence Listening to its resonant roar" powerfulending...it resonates itself...good work |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
"But I am here Left alone in the silence Listening to its resonant roar" Been there too. This one hit home. Great write. JL She said: ”You look cute in the dark.” |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
sittin behind the pipes of the black witch with her loud cracked on what roar are you hearing? silence is a deaf maker sometimes huh then sometimes it is a feather rubbing on cotton dug the view here ms S |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Sometimes we long to speak, but are left only with the option of silence. It can be most difficult. I appreciate so many understanding hearts. Thank you Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nicely written Susan, reminds me of dreams where one is attempting to cry out and no sound comes from their lips as they try to get the attention of someone... Silence is not always golden... |
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yv Senior Member
since 2003-05-30
Posts 574 |
Simply put...beautiful as the poetess who wrote it. I thought it was meaningful, open, and quite simply, poetry. I hope to read more of your beautfiful words. Yv-Goddess of Her Domain. Symbol of Truth Passion Pain. Let Her Smile Rain on the Hearts of the Innocent. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Barry, thank heavens silence can be broken when one is able to find their voice, yv, thank you for your kind words, I do appreciate them. Hugs to you both -- Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
I think that I am actually running out of compliments to give you... That's a compliment right there! A beautiful piece. *Allison* ~~~***~~~Come away with me, Wendy. Come away to Neverland~~~***~~~ |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Excellently expressed ....I know that feel , awaiting in silence , yes me too Hope |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
This was elegant. I liked how it was written. I think I will bookmark this piece. Good Poem |
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lgina Member
since 2004-07-20
Posts 52 |
I loved this one. It spoke right to my quiet place. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Thank you all so very much, your kind replies warm my heart. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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