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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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I woke to tapping brittle like the feet of stars dancing on my roof |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Yes...it's beautiful, isn't it? Now off to bed with you! Can't be writing poetry in the middle of the night! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How very lovely, dear Martie! And Ratleader ... the middle of the night is the best companion for creative souls, you know! ... and you both show the beautiful results! Love, Margherita |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
Martie, Wonderful animation in your words...it comes alive within! Robert Joseph |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
What a lovely little bijou this is! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
LOL at Rat! Sir, she can write anytime she wishes! Especially since it's been so dry in CA...listening to the brittle tap on a dry and dusty roof can be a very good thing... Martie? I wish you rain... |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
When you hear the tapping on the roof, You know that you are keeping it outside. Nice symbolism in this little beauty. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Perhaps it was me. LOL |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Echoing on a dusty sill Caressing peace with a water fill Leaving you wondering yet again Has the overflow Made amends Like the words - makes the mind work Dave |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I knew I should have taken my shoes off when I climbed on your roof!!!! Lovely image from a lovely poetess |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
I woke to the new rains, too, a few times during the night. Even here in the NW, the first rains are something to celebrate (at least by me). I love this write of yours, Martie. Keeping it. K |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How the barest elements capture ether in this write Marti. Delightful. TD |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
short.simple.perfect |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ This is SO GOOD !  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
This reminded me of soft rain falling on the top of a trailer roof . . . Beautiful Martie |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
This makes me smile. |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
I think we have gotten 2-3 inches here today and it isn't the first - you write this so well - Paul |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Those stars! They just can't stop they're feet from dancing!!! *smile* |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
its raining here to...matter of factly, it's supposed to rain until friday...it's times like these when I wish there were a metal roof over my head...refecting the little feet of rain...dancing me to sleep. Smiles and hugs...good one Martie  |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh yes, very short and sweet....and a gorgeous image indeed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ah My Queen of Poetry... you just perfectly described one of my favorite sounds. (Remind me to e mail you the story.  )love you my friend  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is precious |
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