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Busman's holiday
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Busman's holiday |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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Death just hadn’t been himself lately not since that unpleasantness they called The Crusades To him, it was decades of heat and sand and grisly business Then, there was The Plague a time when work was literally stacked around him But now, this morning, there was some time for him, a break from the usual To lie on the bank with a thistle in his teeth playing “what am I?” with the clouds overhead and listening to the brook babbling its secrets into the canopy of willow who keeps them Standing and shucking the mantle of his office he strides through the Loosestrife into the stream down into a dark room of a pool where he reflects on what his existence is lacking Love, he knew, was never part of the bargain though he saw what being loved must be like in the eyes those who saw him as Savior but that has always been a rare thing, and fleeting at best Looking up, he sees the leaves forming themselves into a great green armada escorting a garland made of Crowflowers and Daisies and a billowing white where no cloud should be Ophelia’s gown, now grown heavy the fingers of current plucking and pulling at it her last mad song is now sung in bubbles as she sinks into his pool, his arms, his embrace * * * * * * Should I have titled this NecrOphelia? |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
You draw from a deep well, my friend. Even at the surface this is good poetry....and in the depths of it, excellent. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Um...WOW Bro, this is NOT a passing thing, no way na ah. Marvelous poetry m'friend. going into my library. Mxx cuz fate is not just whose cooking smells good |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Much enjoyed - thank you. |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Delicious. A keeper. Although, I don't know any of your writes that aren't keepers. You write with such flavor. It's refreshing, like jumping into a creek. Great, great poem. Warm regards, Kevin |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
It seems to me, that we both had clouds on our minds . . . *grin* I see so much of (your perception of) yourself in here. The only difference, is that for you, love was never fleeting . . . This is amazing because it made me think how pissed off death is today that we pretty much just off ourselves with so much garbage and emotional baggage whether it be literal dying or soul death. Whatever the case, we do make his job quite easy.  Eddie |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
from this miraculous soul poem, comes an ascent of vigulance....understanding to the uncertainties...and somehow speaks to me of death...whose to say, it is a bad thing? I don't believe it is, and you have given death his own holiday....here.... insightful and thought provoking Enjoyed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Always thought oasis was for drinking. Didn't know I could swim in it. Enjoyed |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I loved Sy's comment to you and he nailed it! When you go to read Sir Wranx you do indeed not only swim, but sink, and darn near drown in the words. I sure loved the idea of the willow guarding the secrets, and agree if only trees could talk what a story they would tell. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ed again you have amazed me with your talent. It seems even sir death doesn't always win (even though he thinks he does hmmm...) loved floating in your words Wranx. But then again, I always do! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
excellent, but then they always are |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Nicely done, Wranx. Nope, I like the title, the other is too -- too. Good to read your words again, they always contain water, have you noticed that? corinne |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
Mr. D finds love... I like NecrOphelia grin you keep getting better Mon |
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