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Eyes Closed |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song 
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Eyes Closed Eyes closed _ between pillow and midnight reflection ... I recall that embrace An embrace in time caught in hesitant sigh pausing before infant breath release reflecting in the slow slide of touch upon silent breeze Locked within the essay of gaze as we wrote the pages of introduction to this manuscript. This manuscript written from a single embrace that toured the passions of our hearts and gave passage ... free passage to journey all paths A passport to discovery that held mysteries of explore to our lips offering resolution to this hunger A hunger that had lingered just one breath too long and gave spirit to freedom of quench to this thirst driven starvation Eyes closed_ between pillow and midnight reflection ... where each touch each embrace each kiss gives birth to the script of a new chapter I recall that embrace Mark Christopher |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
What a wonderfully expressed recollection - poetry in motion - thanks for the journey.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Mark, this is so softly tender and beautiful, very romantic.  You wear romance well. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (09-30-2004 03:09 AM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Now I do too. How lovely of you to share...  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Omg Mark, you have captured a sigh in your words. What a beautiful recollection of pure beauty and heart. We should see this side of your pen more often m'friend... it looks perfect on these pages of blue and on you. I have many favorites of yours, this is surely being added to that group of  Very very well done sir cowboy!The greatest beauty on earth, is found in the hearts of those who love.... [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (09-30-2004 08:39 AM).] |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
excellent romantica sir.. the stop frame photo we all see in our minds when we quit shaking our heads for a moment |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mark, You need a new pillow. LOL An excellent write, enjoyed. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark "Eyes closed_ between pillow and midnight reflection ..." a wonderful time for remembering and making memories!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I am glad you are back here. I remember some time ago, I was back in the archives reading you...and wondering where you were. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
had to come back to breath this one in again Mark... and exhale.... with a sigh! loved your poetic response to my poem, tried to email you mine and forgot I couldn't. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MagaMyFriend~ Your words are even lovelier than I remember ... *sigh*~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow... you know this is beautiful and it's great to get to read you again! |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
An embrace in time caught in hesitant sigh pausing you will never know just how well you said what i have wished to write... this one part....has me moved me to tears... i would love to print this out to read over and over.. please ? and may i suggest you submit it to wildchildpublishing.com wow. sdt. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This is a sigh waiting to happen.. a pause before a kiss.. a hesitation before a touch. Beautiful Mark...good to read you again. Hugs~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Susan - Thank you and I am glad you enjoyed the journey of recollection. Midnitesun - Well as long as we have to wear it eventually, might as well look our best when we do. Thank you dearly. Karen - More than happy to share with you anytime. No peaking plese. Thanks sweet one. Donna - Or at least the recollection of one. Thank you much. DS - Well we do need to stop frame now and then if only to wipe the sweat from the palms do we not? Thank you kind sir. Sy - Yes I do and maybe I need to laminate this next pillow. Drool is a pain first thing in the morning. Thanks for the visit and you kindness. Martie - Some might say the best time to do so. Thanks my sweet poetess of the pier. passing shadows - Glad to be back and thanks for digging the archives for me as well. Donna - Thanks for the double dip and as for the email, well as you know, I chose not to share that some time ago. Get's too confusing for a cowboy to try and write and ride at the same time. Marge - You know, if ya dress em up, then you really can make sound lovely, but none the less, they are just words. All depends in what garb ya put em in. Thank you much. SEA - Thank you for seeing the beauty in it. Much appreciated. Snow - Well, of course you may print it out and I am honored you would wish to do so. I thank you for your response and I hope there was some level of cleansing in those tears. Thank you also for the link suggest. I will check it out. Enchantress - Exactly it, but a wait well worth it and one that lingers. Thank you much and so nice to see you here also. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Mark, What savy in your thoughts here... Superb write! TD |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you for allowing me to print this out, Mark.  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
TD - Thank you for the superb and the read. Much appreciated. Snow - Thank you for asking and if it holds a meaning for you then that is what poetry is about isn't it? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Eyes closed _ between pillow and midnight reflection ... ============================= what a perfect opening...a lovley soft poetic hook to draw the reader in... and how cool can one personification be? An embrace in time caught in hesitant sigh pausing before infant breath release ================================= I think this verse is the at the heart of the poem, the depth from where it comes, and again such poetically strong, impressive use of personifi and analogy... "infant breath release" excellent...perfect.... reflecting in the slow slide of touch upon silent breeze she sells sea shells by the sea shore and sighs at your poetry.  Awesome assonance...makes the read smooth as silk. Locked within the essay of gaze as we wrote the pages of introduction to this manuscript. This manuscript written from a single embrace that toured the passions of our hearts and gave passage ... free passage to journey all paths ====================== I love the writing analogy... writing the manuscript of your heart on time with an embrace...now how cool is that. essay of gaze and I LOVE that personifi and image... how clever and original... how poetically lovely. A passport to discovery that held mysteries of explore to our lips offering resolution to this hunger A hunger that had lingered just one breath too long and gave spirit to freedom of quench to this thirst driven starvation Eyes closed_ between pillow and midnight reflection ... where each touch each embrace each kiss gives birth to the script of a new chapter ======================== Again...the personifications and images create the depth for the reader... Intense, passionate, romantic... yeppers... me thinks you have defined a sigh groovy guy. I love when ya do free verse...and maybe...just maybe SOMEDAY you will listen to me and learn to enjoy reading your own words. (tempermental Aquarian poets)  LOLBeautiful poetic diary of recall MC. I would love to live as a river flows, carried by the surprise of its own unfolding. ~Fluent~ John O'Donohue |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Did I ever tell you how much I HATE following that moth in the comment section LOL - so just know I read it, loved it, and of course I love her too. I was thinking however - now this is a manuscript I wouldn't mind turning the pages and reading again and am with Snow, just sighing away here. |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
And you will never forget it either. Loved this!! Kristabell |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Mysteria - I don't think anyone in their right mind would mind reading it over and over amd over ....... lol. Thank you so much and I am glad you enjoyed. kristabell - You are so right, I won't. Thank you dearly. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
JM - Okay, now time for me to thank the moth properly. You always bring that insight that let's one know what part (s) of a poem strike home. You also point out the feelings you get when reading, and notice some things that even the poet didn't realize was in there. THAT IS HOW WE GROW, so if I am above 5' in pen now, a major part of that could be because of you. I do so much appreciate you and your openness in replying to poetry. Thank you don't seem enough so how 'bout I just drink a cup of raspberry tea just for you. Thanks me sweetest of friends. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark dear man, what a delightful surprise to read one of your gems, I’m so rarely in the forum these days, (life has rather dragged me away from here, of late) sssshhhh don’t tell anyone I slipped in they will expect me to stay and play and I haven’t got the time. However today I popped in to send a loving hug to a friend and saw this wonderful piece by you. The flow is excellent, and as you are so good at doing you have penned a sensational poem. I swear I can almost hear the sigh wrapped within this sensual dreamy piece. Absolutely excellent work, I like it muchly. Sleep soft Let your breath Leave your lips In gentle whispers Of sweet warmth To be carried On the wings Of night Into the depths of Oh Each exhale A murmur of want Of needful heat Grazing That pillow Which carries Your dream Each inhale A whisper of desire Drawing the night Deep into you Through lips Parted in a sigh Of liquid heat Sleep soft And dream a dream Of fires remember Sleep soft Marsha as always Marsha  Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, this embrace has produced a wonderful poem. Love, Margherita |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
~Came back to experience another *sigh*~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Marsha - Thank you for the reply and the poetic response. A poet can always hope to inspire another from his writes. Margherita - Thank you for the kind words. Glad you liked it. Enchantress - Always glad for your visits and I do thank you. |
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