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Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2004-09-28 06:28 PM

like Venus fading

so now i sit
still
behind windows and feel
like Venus fading
and the fog outside doesn’t give a damn

still

i watch it
become one with the sky
with the morning
without you
sleepless

Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2004-09-28 06:36 PM

Nighty night, Venus queen.

The witch prepares for Harvest moon, and smile, the timing of this one gives me two!

(Two wishes it is indeed.)

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2004-09-28 07:26 PM

Maree

I can see you lost in the moment of the window and you are lovely!.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2004-09-29 12:37 PM

Maree,

this is suspended beauty

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2004-09-29 12:52 PM

ultimately magnificant, drawing words out to sigh and transport the reader into the world of you...tremendous, enjoyed

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

5 posted 2004-09-29 12:55 PM

this reads as though a captured moment unlike any other, with a sigh attached to it..very well done...

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

6 posted 2004-09-29 01:20 PM

Though she loses her arms....never does she fade.

SWEET!

Great stuff Darksis

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

7 posted 2004-09-29 02:26 PM

Splendid! Bravo, bravo, bravo! I'm hungry --- feed me. Your writes are always a treat.

Big K

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

8 posted 2004-10-01 01:42 AM

Hi Maree,

Quite nicely done as always.
I enjoyed reading.

Billy

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

9 posted 2004-10-01 05:24 PM

damn..Ed beat me to it, hugs

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

10 posted 2004-10-01 07:27 PM

very very nice

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

11 posted 2004-10-02 11:25 AM

tears...
or none

what is
a little moisture
whether more
or less

compared to
the weight
of this
countless fog

so cry
or withold
it really
doesn't
matter

and each
tears
fog
will pass

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

12 posted 2004-10-02 12:29 PM

beautiful

aujussy wolf

Senior Member

since 2003-08-09

Posts 1215
Michigan

13 posted 2004-10-02 12:32 PM

the end is sad ,
i know that all to well
how things become still
and change before your eyes

~w

Patricia
Member Elite

since 2003-04-06

Posts 2160
Missouri

14 posted 2004-10-03 08:24 AM

Oh, how you captured the feel of the moment!

Your words tell so much here.

Patricia

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

15 posted 2004-10-03 08:42 AM

ah shucks does that mean
ya miss me

hugs, mr moon
(girnz) way cool lady

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

16 posted 2004-10-03 10:39 AM

a nice soft feeling to this one mmy

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

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