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riding on wheels |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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it’s become the norm silly tricks up sleeves pushing of ticket machines and cappuccino’s waiting for september how easy it would be to stay in the city riding on wheels through the hills of suburbia watching handsome young men getting off on the clickity clack grumble of martin place with tight little buns stepping out in calvin jeans and white belt buckles i don’t need much (i reassure) a pinch would get me through the soft side of day The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. ~Stevie Nicks~ [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (08-02-2004 11:13 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree Sometimes, it's so nice to get away to a place where you can just, be. That's how this felt to me. Loved it. So glad to see a poem from you!  |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You make me smile with this one! I have to tell you, Maree, I don't need much either. I get excited everytime I see a new cherry tomatoe turn red on the vine....hehehe ....jo |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie and Iliana, thank you both for your lovley replies and the smile that I have right now. Maree  The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
scuse me ms...it was the bakery and those kind of buns you were supposed to be out looking at...spanky spanky kool write ms |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"i don’t need much (i reassure) a pinch would get me through the soft side of day" Love this Maree... Thanks for the grins. Hugs~ ~ Those who complain the sun has gone out of their world |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
yes this put a smile on my face |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Smiling hugely... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Only that? A nice place to begin, maybe.... and I can't imagine that wish going unfulfilled! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
i don’t need much (i reassure) a pinch would get me through the soft side of day Maree, I love the thoughts this brought to mind!!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
we won't be waiting for September for long  love the last lines here |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
lol, love the fun of this  Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Raph puts on a white belt and gives Maree a pinch |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Dark Angel I love the mood you're poem contains. I especially like thinkin of a girl like you checking me out heheh just kidding. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is almost as gorgeous as the poet! Your observational skills are fantastic here, and with that wistful ending, you're irresistible. Brava Luscious One!  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
The soft side of the day is a nice place to be, if only we could stay longer than. Sweet, Maree~ |
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muted
since 2004-01-15
Posts 2949Elapsing, Eclipsing, Evolving |
oh maria, so nice you dont need much, cause i gots very little to give...cept my hugs..always a big supply of those to go 'round LOL *pinch*  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
big smiles and hugs I could smell the coffee and vision you with your fingers all puckered and ready to pinch, you little wicked girl you? Very enjoyable read Have lotsa fun and make fond memories you do for us, when you write about them |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
While I see the humor in this..I see something deeper as well, which speaks to a sadness and a feeling of not quite.... then again, I have been told I think too much.... in any case, it is always a pleasure to read your words... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
i don’t need much (i reassure) a pinch would get me through the soft side of day I ask for it all... then reassure myself I didn't really need it anyway. *S* Excellent write!!! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Thank you everyone for all your gorgeous replies, they mean so much. and Suthern? LOL @I ask for it all... then reassure myself I didn't really need it anyway. Maree The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice images...James |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
Nice write. Don't know how this one squeeked by me. Don't know if you'd like it here. We wear mostly Wranglers and large metal belt buckles. But I've heard it said by some women about cowboys' butts. Who knows? I like a girls butt in Calvins. That's nice to see. Does that count? I would have categorically agreed with your writing if you would have wrote it from a man's perspective. However, my security in my sexuality, I suppose, only goes so far. I just can't agree on guy butts! Lots of laughs came from this one! Fun read. Kevin |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Back again...like this one...James |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Smiling at this one. I like it when you talk this way. Thanks, Billy |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
I'm glad this came back up -- so I can tip my hat...to the lady with the tipped hat! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a scene! what a feeling you brought with this one... |
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aujussy wolf
since 2003-08-09
Posts 1215Michigan |
PINcHes lol luv the pic too ~J |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I read this several times, each time I had felt a feeling of melancholy that no words could be found to blame. Kind of like hearing the nuance of a grand piano when you are looking at an upright. wonderful mmy dear J |
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