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DavePage
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0 posted 2004-09-28 02:18 PM


We mapped words drifting across mental synapse that triggered understanding bypassing everything we had built to thwart connection

We saw the black blue sky of light dancing in a suit of pure carbon black with the heat of unsupressed emotion

Almighty as darkness mirrored light we dismembered our atoms in a void echoing a wayward message sparking between us communication

We heated firing substantiated bliss instruments we had never tested as we melted circuits with the desire of new electrics

We are now as we should be

dave

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LeeJ
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1 posted 2004-09-28 02:56 PM


perhaps more mature, enlightened, complimented?  

A pleasure read

miscellanea
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2 posted 2004-09-28 03:10 PM


Dave,
  The passion in this is... incredible! I've felt what you've described so wonderfully.
A special keeper... Thank you!
               miscellanea

DavePage
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3 posted 2004-09-28 03:25 PM


You are amazing in your words of compliment as once again I vere to electrics of, will the cabling survive

Dave

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4 posted 2004-09-29 06:51 AM


very nice
i enjoy reading what you write


Margherita
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5 posted 2004-09-29 08:03 AM


quote:
Almighty as darkness mirrored light we dismembered our atoms in a void echoing a wayward message sparking between us communication



Oh!

Very good, Dave!

Love, Margherita

DavePage
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6 posted 2004-09-29 11:29 AM


LeeJ

I dont know - perhaps we blast under a sky of words that seek more


miscellanea
          
Fusion was at the back of my mind but it didn't seem to be cold fusion but a fusion of ideas, words, static communication, listening to the rasps and burrs of a message suddenly crystal clear

MGROVES

Thanks - write something for us to enjoy

Margherita

Must be that clouded space saloon bit where you eyes meet and later email you to tell you how it was

This was written in fun, but thanks

Thanks to all

Dave


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