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Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
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South Africa

0 posted 2004-09-27 03:32 AM


The clouds have lost their lining
temporarily
and hang so low overhead
I fear they’ll swallow love
and mangle in their hungry jaws
each and every thread
woven with precision
into love’s abiding weave.

I can almost hear them chewing
if I listen carefully
and the drops of water on my head
must be moisture dribbling down
from the corners of
over zealous lips.

Pitter-patter slowly first
before the full import
and there is no where to hide
from the force of ridicule
threatening, always threatening,
to wash the goodness out
from those who stand beneath
love’s delicate umbrella.

And the sun is overpowered
by the fullness of the clouds
and feebly tries to rise
as testimony to love
and it does in the background
far from an earthly need
to feel its warmth and energy
penetrate loneliness.

The clouds have lost their lining
temporarily
but of love umbrellas,
will they stand the test of time?


© Copyright 2004 Helen - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2004-09-27 11:35 AM


Helen

"but of love umbrellas,
will they stand the test of time?"

I think true love stands all tests given to it, including death.  I hope the sun shines for you soon.  We need rain here.  


DavePage
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since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917

2 posted 2004-09-27 12:24 PM


And someone said once "from love comes light"

Yes sometimes but the clouds and the rain are also an old chinese saying that means something completely different

Your words spoke of a haze - was it waiting for skies to clear, or the scent of emotion

Dave

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
3 posted 2004-09-27 03:32 PM


Hi Martie - Yes, I do agree with you.  The sun is actually shining here - I just happened to be thinking about a picture in my possession of dark clouds and the sun.

Dave - Thank you.  I'm always pleased when someone gets me to think about my words because perhaps - just perhaps - I merely convey the words of "soul" or the unconscious mind and I can't know for sure whether it's mine or not.  

However, I do believe the clouds are "life" and that life can and sometimes does quite effectively annihilate love.  "She's" obviously afraid of that even though she knows love is still alive and well (the sun) somewhere in the background of this thing called life. That's the best I can make of it.  Oh, and the soul is pure emotion - pure in the sense of being untainted by ... life.

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