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Susan
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since 2004-03-27

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walking the surreal

0 posted 2004-09-27 02:06 AM

I read a poem that made me think, then made me feel, then I had to step into a different pair of shoes and look from another's eyes - it came out rather simplistic, but I think it speaks volumes - at least to me . . .

Second Best

She is all that I am not
Yet she is not all that you need
And where then does that leave me?

You are all that I want
But I cannot have all
For she holds you still

Yet I settle
For some is better than none
Even if I die a little

s.a.t.

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Kevo
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since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

1 posted 2004-09-27 02:15 AM

Tragic. Beautiful writing with a tragic message. Pinning all of you on someone who only appreciates some of you...tragic. That is not love to me. Your write is a prolific message of doomed love, in my opinion. I could not expect my wife to love me if I held another in higher regard (God aside, of course). Your poem, was short and sweet with a heck of a punch. Poetry at its best. Ashame some of the best poetry is inspired by tragic situations.

Big K

ice
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since 2003-05-17

Posts 3404
Pennsylvania

2 posted 2004-09-27 07:01 AM

Simplistic.....not
What you have done here is what good poetry content does....taken a complicated subject and atomized it, and the real trick to that is to not lose meaning or intent, which also you have not..
----------ice
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Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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Realms of Light

3 posted 2004-09-27 09:47 AM

Susan ~

Big K and ice wrote wonderful replies that I would like to echo!!!

You're THE best, Sensational Susan!

Loves 'n hugs,
Linda

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

4 posted 2004-09-27 09:51 AM

Kevin and Ice - I appreciate your commnets, I am glad to know that it reads with intent -I too think it is soooo sad when one loves another in total, yet in return settles knowing that she/he is not loved as such in return. It hurts me, to think from that perspective -

Thanks again, I am pleased that my work has the potential to impact someone -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2004-09-27 09:52 AM

Ah, EA - you replied at the same time as I- you are a sweetie and I appreciate your encouragement -

Hugs you - Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

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USA

6 posted 2004-09-27 10:29 AM

enjoyed

Robert Frazier
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since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

7 posted 2004-09-27 10:38 AM

susan, you should never "settle"...sadly, well written.

Rf

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

8 posted 2004-09-27 12:12 PM

Yes - it echoes of maybe some love is better than letting it go, because you will always be there but at a sacrifice.

Only love to the extent of a drug would sustain it.

A reality write of what does happen.

Dave

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

9 posted 2004-09-27 01:46 PM

Robert - easier said than done, but you are right - thanks for the reply,

Vandana, Thank you.

Dave - thank you for your thoughts - it is a hard thing, reality.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

E S West
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since 2004-08-31

Posts 116
California

10 posted 2004-09-27 02:14 PM

That one really hit home with me...
tugging at my past and now...

Excellent write.... E S West

"always be true to SELF, and follow your heart.."
" Ignorance is the root of all evil "

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

11 posted 2004-09-27 08:09 PM

E S - hope it didn't hit too hard

If it did, I offer a hand up

Thanks for your reply

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2004-09-30 12:52 PM

I know these feelings well...I would rather have something than nothing...James

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

13 posted 2004-09-30 01:25 AM

Yet I settle
For some is better than none
Even if I die a little

********************
Very powerful in it's impact and straight to the heart of the word. I much enjoyed this piece and I do believe I also read the one that inspired this response from you. I would say you responded quite well and your case of point to the highest of regards. Well done

James_A_Fraser
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since 2003-09-03

Posts 972
Out Making Anticlines

14 posted 2004-09-30 01:31 AM

I could have written this....and with three fewer letters. I never did like that 19th letter very well anyway.

~~J

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

15 posted 2004-09-30 10:53 AM

Thank you for your thoughtful replies -

James - sometimes something is better than nothing.

Mark - I appreciate your remarks greatly, thank you.

James F. Hmmmm, you had me counting on my fingers

Hugs all - Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

16 posted 2004-10-04 04:33 PM

Oh, lordie... do I ever know this... looking longingly at someone who's looking longingly at someone else... wishing they'd just look our way. *S* Settling is a slow death... but the alternative only speeds the process. *S*

LOL @ counting the alphabet... I did, too! *S* Only to argue... without "S" we'd never have "yes"... and that's one of my favorite words. *S*

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

17 posted 2004-10-04 08:14 PM

Thanks Suthern - your words convey your understanding of this

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

18 posted 2004-10-04 09:05 PM

Woven in this sadness, this unequitable contemplation, there thrives the best that love becomes...unconditional.

Excellent write Susan.
TD

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

19 posted 2004-10-04 10:57 PM

thank you TD for your thoughtful and kind reply

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

20 posted 2004-10-05 10:04 PM

Wow...

This has to be a difficult moment for any
one who stands in the wings when the main
players are together...wondering if they
will get a turn, seeing the love being
shared...yet...knowing that in the back of
one person's mind there might be a second
thought brewing...of he/she who stands
alone...reluctantly sharing and wishing they
might taste the wine.

Excellently written Susan. Yes Indeedy!

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

21 posted 2004-10-05 10:07 PM

Not just reading this tonight... feeling it... and...

You nailed it. *S*

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

22 posted 2004-10-06 04:37 AM

yes...

Susan
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since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

23 posted 2004-10-06 02:36 PM

Barry - you worded it so well - yes, this is how it must be - thank you for the thoughtful reply, dear Sir.

*S* and P.S. thank you for your replies - It pleases me that my work should move you -

Hugs all -

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

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