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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2004-09-22 06:00 PM


I mutter my intent
aloud
thinking thoughts
that run too deep
distract me from the thought
of thought
mutters even in my sleep
talking typing
as I write
I'm sure that I
must sound a sight
whispering my "I love you"
imagining "I love you too"
making love by alphabet
then screaming at the emptiness
curse the words I lovingly
polish - I forsake the dreams
missing bedcheck yet again
because my love, the love I'm in,
cannot be denied
by whim
of eight hours sleep.

I dream...

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Sunshine
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1 posted 2004-09-22 06:02 PM


I'm sure that I
must sound a sight

I know I do...especially when
citing sounds...



You knew I'd be in read this one,
right?

DavePage
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2 posted 2004-09-22 06:38 PM


Yours words are supreme.

Comments from me are there, but your quality will always be there.

Dave

Wordsworth's syndrome

Alone in my thoughts but I do not lack my thoughs
I seek my thoughts that others wish to buy
I die with a lack of money
To feed others

I need my mind but I buy
For your need to
Buy me
To love by language
for your lunch box
booklet

then screaming at the emptiness
curse the words I lovingly
polish - I forsake the dreams
missing bedcheck yet again
because my love, the love I'm in,
cannot be denied
by whim
of eight hours sleep.

I dream...

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2004-09-22 07:16 PM


...always touching me...
muted
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4 posted 2004-09-22 09:05 PM


yes yes yes
this
really touches me....

youve written perfectly

this one i want to keep.....*click*


froggy
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5 posted 2004-09-23 12:08 PM


I like this one.

:-)

Dark Angel
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6 posted 2004-09-23 04:45 PM


Oh, I felt this one. I DO understand.

Perfectly said m'lady.



Mxx

Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2004-09-23 04:54 PM


Soft smiles and nodding at you...perfect!
Love ya lady~

~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~

Larry C
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8 posted 2004-09-23 09:49 PM


Okay Serene one! A true confession. You are too dang deep for me.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

wranx
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Moved from a shack to a barn
9 posted 2004-09-23 11:20 PM


Dream, m'witch.....dream sweetly

even within the waking

You is TOO daggone good!

iliana
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10 posted 2004-09-24 12:07 PM


My comments are never sufficient for your remarkable writing, Karen. Library clicked.   ...jo
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
11 posted 2004-09-24 06:11 PM


Once I thought about the thinking the thought but then I muttered it instead and found that I lost the thought to the intent which left me muttering even more ... and by that time the alarm was going off so the 8 hours of dream became just a dream in awake.  Just my luck!!!  So very wonderful to be reading you and you impress now as much as ever.  Truely loved the verse and the non thought of thought in this one.  Let it flow until it spills.  
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
12 posted 2004-09-24 06:54 PM


making love by alphabet
then screaming at the emptiness


so many good lines, Karen
( I hope you were able to help Matt and that he responded) Thanks

M

serenity blaze
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13 posted 2004-09-25 02:36 PM


Sunshine? Do you talk in your sleep too? *wink*

Davepage--yer a sweetie, m'friend. I thank you. HUGS

Dixie...You know that song "Dixie Dear"? I think of you every time I hear it. Hugs to you as well.

froggy gets a kiss 'cause I ALWAYS kiss frogs. (Insurance purposes)

Maree? You gets kisses and cuddles, 'cause you let me hold the remote! *snort*

Nance? I just wuv woo. (and where has Chrislane been?)

Larry? My reply to your reply might go too deep for forum decorm. *evil grin* Love you too my buddy!

MY YETI! The dog almost attacked the mailman FOR me--where is my Bukowski? (impatient witch here) *laughing*

jo jo--I love reading YOUR work as well, and I hope to remedy that this weekend! smooches you

Mark B?--Now that you're here, would you STAY awhile. Sheesh. It took me an entire year to discover your poetry and then you disappeared on me! *pouts, winks and smooches*

M? I wrote him, and I'll write him again. I forgot to warn him that if I don't recognize something in the subject line it gets deleted. If he tried writing and didn't hear from me, that is most likely what happened. Tell him the witch is a little paranoid. She's been burnt before. grinning....

And yes, I should reply individually more often, but I'm more lazy than ungrateful.

Hugs to all and thanks for reading my meanderings.

Dark Angel
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14 posted 2004-09-27 08:07 PM


M'lady... smiling, it's all yours

Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks

Susan
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walking the surreal
15 posted 2004-09-27 09:51 PM


Had to read this a couple of times, I like the sound and images so well -  enjoyed.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

JamesMichael
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16 posted 2004-09-29 12:18 PM


Enjoyed...James
littlewing
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17 posted 2004-09-29 12:36 PM


thinking thoughts
that run too deep
distract me from the thought
of thought
mutters even in my sleep
talking typing
as I write


something all of us can relate to . . .

dream away Lady K . . .
please

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

18 posted 2004-09-29 07:06 PM


I blushingly thank you all, and I blush, because yanno? sometimes I show more of me than I intend.

Thanks all for reading.

I love you all. (I really do.)




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