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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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God: "We've been reduced to games." The Goddess nodded hurricanes as she whipped her hair to hide the tears that streamed the goddess eyes marking rivers mapped anew. God: "My Goddess, I love you..." whisper heavy sighs of tide and with a finger's circumstance God created winds that dance from the sea of salt of tears that the Goddess wept "goodbye" "Let me kiss you once again..." "God..." she laughed, "you're full of you!" pulling Goddess panties on... "but then," she smiled, "you're God, aren't you?" Smiling as she shut the door, as God lit his cigarette. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (09-28-2004 05:22 AM).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, just WOW! greatbigsigh I have no words, I do, I mean...they just won't come out right. I love it when YOU come out to play  to my library Mxx Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Now...THAT's personifying a storm... Very well done, serenity. This one, as Maree sort of said, is a  Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Amazing...simply amazing!! Love ya lady~ Into my library this goes! ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
What a creative way to visualize recent events. Well done! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
I love it ^_^ and then He created the horse... |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Considering I am still smiling, you can bet I absolutely loved this - loved it! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Wow. Three simple letters that fall in place when I can't describe the intensity of the poem! Your creative thinking and writing is amazing to me! Shall I bow down to you? Just kidding. Simply amazing. Keeper is written all over this! miscellanea |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
LOL, talk about smokin.... You always paint the scene with a new hue.  a great spin, Karen |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
agreeing with Kacy here, only you could write this . . . It reminded me of The Prophet, his sketches: http://www.kahlil.org/artwork009.html |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Yep! there she is. Love this, m'witch! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks you guys...I'm glad this wasn't taken offensively, as the personification was based on my own belief system(s) (not to mention experience--laughing) and not intended as a slight to anyone else's religion/spiritual beliefs--nor was intended to make light of anyone's hardships either. My prayers are with those who have felt (and continue to) feel the brunt of what is hopefully, this PAST hurricane season. thank you to those who understood and replied  (stay dry, yeti...wet fur is only good in small doses--  ) |
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