Open Poetry #33 |
Snapshots of Time |
Martie
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Posts 28049California |
Snap Shots of Time A feather drifts blown from a mother’s delight just a piece of fluff crossing the porch hesitating by the sheets in sun dry flapping passing the camellia bush and the laughter of a little girl falling falling The path behind the house around the plum tree a gallop of broom pony through the hole in the fence into spring green weeds of the vacant lot away away Catch me not grandfather with your fetid breath and big hands I will dazzle you with my bravery now and leave you to your war of feeling all unsure behind me grasping grasping I hold the words I seek though transient my mind change spills my color down halls of ivy and shouts upon the roof the opera into all the open windows listening listening Rock me my baby is gone take me to the place of grace where candles burn in wake of grief tiptoe across the porthole where peace resides let me be the holder of your warm again again Break me with your harsh judgment watch my pieces fall around you while I wait for something that I thought was cherish and find that there are many other feelings forgiving forgiving Take me now this love all wild and gleeful And rearrange my life all mixed and matted calm the tangled weave and breathe me sweet for hands can touch a place so kept a part with healing healing See this key that time has made to lock away the bitter feelings made of wood so finely crafted from a place far beyond this earth thrown into the curve of the rolling hills then grown a tree where I lay me down dreaming dreaming Two strong spirits came from seeds of youth all unsure and folly building boys all pout and playful who build another girl all dimpled sweet and love finds me still with my arms open smiling smiling In this place of day now I am a marveler of what I find in the search of all so keenly human that celebrate a soul of gladdened knowing nothing can take what cannot break for loving loving -------- a repost for my 5th year anniversary at Pip! |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Now THAT'S poetry! Beautifully written, and such a wonderful summation of what's gone before, prologue to what will be. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Enjoyed and congrats!! and then He created the horse... |
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J.Samm Member
since 2004-01-12
Posts 415Iloilo City, Philippines |
i love the images, they are such vivid snapshots...and the effect of the repetition of the word in every line was quite dramatic too |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Martie, Wow! So much packed into this. A life time, I know. It is so good for me to see the intensity after all this time and the ability to recall. You make my aching heart warm, my crying eyes to see, my sad face to smile and my mind to relax. You are a gem and this is a gift. Thank you... And I still believe: If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. [This message has been edited by Larry C (09-21-2004 03:45 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I am here in silent awe .... admiring your work. Congratulations on your fifth year here, to the delight of all! You are special. Love and hugs. Margherita |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Look at all the celebration...the write started out so sad...and was lifted by your own determination to feel your soul again, again... As one who double dips in words just like this... You know I approve of the repost for such a cherished moment! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you rock faith like nobody else can...an exceptional view with many hints of understanding, which stands firm behind the pain...like a fresh new soul waiting to be born, unto our minds...wrapping us deeply and protectively within some universal allowance of freedom, letting go of those things we don't understand...to flow into flowers new, colorful and in another place, yet walking right there beside us... You are a wonder! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"The path behind the house around the plum tree a gallop of broom pony through the hole in the fence into spring green weeds of the vacant lot away away" ~ The only difference between you and Norman Rockwell, is that he uses pigments to paint his pictures. Thank you for sharing your poetic spirit with us for 5 years! Linda |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie All in the drift of a feather. Amazing |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Thank you for bringing your words not formerly seen to the front of our consciousness once again. There is so much of youth and yet the passing of time as well. Good job! Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
A wonderful celebration write Martie! Congratulations on your 5th anniversary at Passions. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Autumn..the year's last, loveliest smile.~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Bravely beautiful! Thank you for reposting it. *smile* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ EACH snapshot ... a keeper~ This is YOU ... you are THIS ... we all are so blessed to have you in our lives~ God, I love you sooooooooo~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ahhh Martie, it is not hard to see why your poetry is so revered m'friend. Congratulations on 5 years too, and a big Happy Birthday to you as well today. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
One of my favourites Martie, Happy 5th Anniversary.....and ..... HAPPY BIRTHDAY! YAY! I love you lady. Mxx Well I see you doing, What I try to do for me, With the words from a poet, And a voice from a choir, And a melody, nothing else matters. ~Stevie Nicks |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
In this place of day now I am a marveler of what I find in the search of all so keenly human that celebrate a soul of gladdened knowing nothing can take what cannot break for loving loving Martie? YOU ARE poetry! what a gift you are... The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
great poetry Martie - lots of stories and life in these wonderfully crafted verses - you are one of the cornerstones here at PiP - Paul |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
In any album of memories, there lies the innocence and the loss of it, the lessons and the knowledge that goes with it, and of course, there is always the many paths that we have tried all ending up to that one snapshot we are in search of .... the one that defines our lives the way that we would like to have in living color and full of shadowed gray. So very glad to be reading you again and congrats on your 5th anniversary. Forgive me for fogetting to bring the wine, I seemed to have for gotten to stop for that on my way here. |
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