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what it ever is |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Lost to chance the circumstance weighted wheel against the spin Cost the dance of me at last tapping toe and grinning grin anxious to begin again impatient for the end I am praying for a chance at last beginning at the bend of spine I tend to read my stories twice and tell them thrice as much (oh my!) the renderings of fingering the drops of scribe from right to left Hebraic test (signifigance) of the singularit-ink as the scholars ponder deep and scream the fraud of what it ain't when it disagrees with creed of the snake of intellect swallowing itself the need spins too fast to count the spokes: ouroborous-ouroborous at times I am afraid to sleep lest I dream it all again the - same - the - same beneath the lids refrained as what it ever is played upon the widest screen when I'm much too wide awake tossed amidst my contemplate losing it in "I'm aware" despair I had it - there - and I named it gone again. |
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Skyfire 
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Once again you have me in a state of awe. I love reading your writing  and then He created the horse... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Yer amazin m'lady karen  into my library. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Agreed. You do have a definate way of spinning tales with rich imagery, the verbiage fractically keeping the frenzied overworked hyperactive neurons firing, tweaking a muscle here and here and there, just enough to slight sleep, soaked in rum and coffee. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh that last verse |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
Powerful is the word to describe this poem...it takes the soul on a journey leaving a lasting effect... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Insidious is the path of when but then, when is when really then? Love the write. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
refrained as what it ever is ~*~ This had the spin of a quarter in the air... deciding which side to land upon... and coming to a halt on its edge. Loved it! |
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Mr_Brady's_Housekeeper New Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 8 |
"at times I am afraid to sleep lest I dream it all again the - same - the - same beneath the lids refrained as what it ever is" Just Awesome. Alice |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
weighted wheel against the spin Everything was summed up for me right there K . . . I miss talking to you . . . |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Hebraic test (signifigance) of the singularit-ink as the scholars ponder deep and scream the fraud of what it ain't when it disagrees with creed of the snake of intellect swallowing itself the need spins too fast to count the spokes: ouroborous-ouroborous "weighted wheel against the spin" I like how you put this all together. Aweome spinning! miscellanea |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You and me both! Great write, Karen!  ....jo |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
wow Karen....just wow....  I don’t want the world to see me |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
nice spin, Karen especially the weighted wheel |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thank you this one was close to my heart with special thanks to my bri for the inspiration...I don't know how to thank you, but I'm sure I'll think of something. |
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