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soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2004-09-08 05:24 AM

Midori

The light of a pearl colored dawn
falls softly on my cheeks today
as I disappear into my coat
listening to the Beach Boys
wishing instead I could share
small brittle moments like these
and share my warm love
with Midori
as wet lawns hiss the day to begin
I'm feeling the ghost of her embrace
like a late spring snowfall
falling lightly on my skin
with her ember eyes smouldering
hovering over me in the night
wish I could renew these moments
within this warm love
within Midori
she is conspicous in her absence
the dark cold desert of my bed
scares me to death at 3 a.m
so I hide in the dimming glow
of my poorly written words
translating her image in my mind
with all my idiot heart
for Midori
so this is Midori
or the best I could do
to describe her
but imitated, artificially flavored
and never to replace her
with that green firefly gaze
she painted my life with
she pained my life with
but she stays inside me still
and somewhere out there
beyond the pearl colored dawn
burning my poetry
to warm her winter heart
I'm sure

Kevo
Member

since 2004-06-02

Posts 466
Navarro County, Texas, USA

1 posted 2004-09-08 05:30 AM

Ouch! The ending stings! What an incredible piece of writing! I have seen some of your posts here and was waiting for my turn to say welcome here among us! You are cordially invited to share in our thoughts and share with us your thoughts. We are quite the compassionate, supportive, caring group of poets here. This is a home of sorts for those inspired to claim their gift of poetry. Your poem was very fluid and engaging. I stuck every word under my coat and ran off with it so it could sink in a bit. You are a talented poet and I would encourage you grow among us and continue to share your works of brilliance here. This poem was a keeper and i look forward to reading more from you.

Warm regards,

Kevin

A Romantic Heart
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

2 posted 2004-09-08 05:59 AM

Like a river flowing, your words flood my mind with beautiful thoughts~

~Love and Hugs
~ARH

WELCOME TO PIP!

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2004-09-08 06:38 AM

I don't believe anyone would burn your poetry...this was absolutely beautiful.
Welcome to PIP, I'm certain you'll find, not only a lot of talented artists here, but make some very good friends to boot.

Thank you for sharing.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2004-09-08 06:40 AM

Welcome to Passions! Please, check
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Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2004-09-08 09:21 AM

Welcome to Passions!
I very much enjoyed your entrance post.
I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have the sand in my shoes. ~

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2004-09-08 09:22 AM

she painted my life with
she pained my life with
but she stays inside me still
and somewhere out there
beyond the pearl colored dawn
burning my poetry
to warm her winter heart
I'm sure

WOW, just wonderful writing.

Welcome to Passions, enjoyed your first post very much and am looking forward to more.

sim0riah
Member

since 2004-09-07

Posts 253
Wyoming USA

7 posted 2004-09-08 09:28 AM

Very nicely written!!! So far I've found this place to be inspiring to continue writing..And your post continues that inspiration

sim0riah

Only at night you can see the depth of the sun

Sim0riah

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

8 posted 2004-09-08 09:52 AM

Welcome to the Passion's family !
Much enjoyed your first post !
Have fun here~
Chris

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

9 posted 2004-09-08 03:59 PM

Thank you all very much for the kind welcome and comments. I love it here already!

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

Daniel Storm
Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 91
New York

10 posted 2004-09-08 10:51 PM

Hey, another newbie. Love the Beach Boys too. This is really mysterious and very nice.

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