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sim0riah Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 253Wyoming USA 
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Stranded As if in the middle of the ocean Helplessly falling towards the center of the earth My life has lost all devotion Where can I turn to find my worth Hoping that one day everything will turn out right Praying along the way the sun will shine all night No more rain No more tears No more pain No more fears No more feeling this way Help is on the way No more words needed to say It's time to start a new day |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Nice optimistic ending to a sad poem--we all need hope.  ~sky So you go and make it happen |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
We go on. Continuing through our nothingness or our everything. I took away thoughts of a life with more meaning with this poem. - Haze |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Beautiful words and wonderful read. :-) |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Very nice. I liked the ending as well; I write moody things like this often, and rare is it that they end with a sliver of hope or redemption or anything. Good job. "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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Kevo Member
since 2004-06-02
Posts 466Navarro County, Texas, USA |
1st - Welcome to PIP. You are most welcome here within the confines of compassion's blue pages. It is nice to see you posting here and I appreciate the opportunity to share in your world of thoughts and emotions through your posts. 2nd - Your poem was teaming with emotion. It was well written, and the emotion with which it was written was very clearly communicated. I thought it was a brilliant bit of writing that I appreciated as poetry and appreciated as a reminder of some the rougher times I've had. Last - The nice thing about days sometimes, is that sooner or later it's going to end and you get to try it again tomorrow. Time has a funny way of ensuring that occurs at the same time every day. You can set your watch to it. Welcome again, and warm regards, Kevin |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Somehow you reached right in and pulled out what was inside my heart today....thanks I needed to read this! ~love and Hugs ~ARH  |
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