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Crystal Alamo
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Crystal Alamo |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Crystal Alamo Ringed by the enemy’s presence, the onslaught, comprehensive; a retreat in order, she scuttled for cover. Ill fitting, the confines quickly realized repeated abrasions, but injuries presented a necessary expenditure were she to remain tightly enclosed, perimeters safely secured from within. Contained by this self seethed fortification, she thought herself safeguarded, but rage spewed betrayal at every opportunity. The strain of securing her viewpoint, clearly confirmed by the crumbling foundation, a downfall was now imminent. Detached from the destiny of the casualties, she carried no white flag with her. The backdrop echoed with jump jump jump, while caring bystander’s begged her exit but refusal was her Alamo. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The strain of securing her viewpoint, clearly confirmed by the crumbling foundation, a downfall was now imminent. ~*~ Sometimes we don't realize that when standing so strong, for so long, our foundation begins to crumble... just as you say. Some shoring up is required, but that doesn't come until we let others know we cannot do it all by ourselves...  Your honesty is not only admirable... would that more know how to be like you. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well lady, this “Alamo” has been my strength and my downfall, and just when I thought I was writing this from the point of being past it, I find myself looking at the situation from the inside……but at least this time my eyes are open, and I have help *smile* |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
jellybeans, You are an incredible writer, maintaining such depth through your analogy! In awe, I found myself reading this several times, each time feeling more. miscellanea |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Fantastic write JB... sending heart hugs your way. ~ Summer can't be over... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
incredible |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I've said it more times then not, our alamo is our fortress and of God, but can sometimes be a lonely walk...if we so chose to follow...along with all of life, there is always a tradeoff |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
hugs my friend... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all, this one wanted written but insisted on having its own way, I must have scrapped 4 or 5 'beginnings' .....smile, thank you again |
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msflame Member
since 2002-05-21
Posts 188 |
Excellent poem! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
fantanstic  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
she thought herself safeguarded, but rage spewed betrayal at every opportunity. Just remember, my friend... a battle lost doesn't mean the war is over... or that victory won't be yours. *S* Excellent work!!! |
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