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September come November
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September come November |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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September come November thus, self forbidding mizzle to befriend me in those years paled hoary there appears an unoccupied interim of time where coming aware splinters of having lost my way recall of déjà vu eviscerates, something potent gnaws, walls between then and now sheer only to opaque, senility will most likely clarify what motions were made, for snapped memories color decades, but eye’s grit decrees absence two fingering dimensional images does not make them warm for a second time I would be a girl again, if doing so meant mother’s lap should hold shed sentiments or father’s shirt would gather denimed memories and clouded outbursts perhaps once this decade is fulfilled, I shall see Octobers again warming to those days between September come November when pain will ease perhaps once this decade is fulfilled, perhaps, once perhaps Repost |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Karilea, Time is on your side and your memories will serve you well. A comforting read indeed. Thank you.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes, perhaps Karilea...perhaps. Lovely write...lovely you in your new pic! Hugs~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing....James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thank you for the repost |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
I would be a girl again, if doing so meant mother’s lap should hold shed sentiments or father’s shirt would gather denimed memories and clouded outbursts Beautiful my friend. Hugs, Chrislane "At one glance |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
oh this touches so deeply dear Kari, thank you for the respost of loveliness.  |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
one of the most touching I've read....thank you ... I don’t want the world to see me |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Deeper than surfactant beauty....this poem cries from the page, of mixtures of deep emotion, the passing of time and the need to slow it down...love it ---------ice ><> Come read to me some poem, |
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MyHeartofShadows Member
since 2004-09-04
Posts 88Hyattsville, MD |
Although I like this, I feel I am missing some of the meaning. My first impression is to say don’t rush the year through, it comes too fast already. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karilea, this speaks so much to me. I'm reminded of my grandmother, when she did indeed revert to a little girl in her last days, in her senility. But, somehow, I thought that a great gift, for it brought me closer to her in the end. *hugs you* love ya, SIL |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This piece is super. Wonderful wordsmithing and choice of vocab! Eric Ain't doin nothin at all |
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ShiningWindHaze Member
since 2004-09-06
Posts 138California, United States |
First of all, Karilea is an awesome name. I never heard it before. What pulled me in here is my birthday, November 4th. So naturally I decided to see what you'd write about November only to take with me a vision of a beautiful woman's own heart. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
....and maybe, just maybe, it has happened for you already....and it is the pain that's become that two-dimensional memory, made to seem deeper than it has become now, by being painted on the glass of each intervening October for a long long time. I hope so. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you all for reading. That I posted this on the date I did, speaks for itself. Some things never leave a person. I know...I just didn't know in the losing, I would gain so much. You are all blessed friends and poets. Thank you for allowing me to be. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
And one perhaps blends into another... Some things are both beautiful and painful... like this. *S* |
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