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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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conversationally impaired She ran into an idea, running wild and free, but confused by its meanderings, deemed it a lost and bedraggled thought, begging to be cared for. She found a box for the idea to lie in, rummaged around, found some adjectives to feed it, and so it wouldn’t cry and keep her awake at night, threw in a verb or two for it to chew on. She sat down with a cup of coffee, and started to question where this thought might have come from and if there might be any others like it. She even worried over the possibility that just after she would start to cherish it, the previous owner would show up and reclaim it. But come nighttime and no one arrived in search of her newly found notion, which at this moment was trying to climb in bed with her, the decision was apparent, if this idea were to become hers, it must be made presentable. Once bathed, fluffed, arranged, and prettily adorned with pronouns and perfume she found that her idea was much too adorable for wording. By this time she stopped worrying about its family relations, gave it a name, and commenced to taking it with her everywhere she went. But this idea did not flourish constrained; in fact her thought was looking rather sickly. She tried to perk it up with adverbs and conjunctions, but even under constant construction, her idea was fading quickly. Distressed by the condition of her concept, she knew she must return it to where she found it and sadly watched as her idea disappeared out of view. She walked away arm in arm with the conclusion that some things are better left unsaid. |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Dang, but I'm glad you didn't leave this for the dust bunnies... because now I've got it locked in my library! Edgy? Yes...but still standing... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
lol, thank you and would you believe this is one of the few I have written that didn't insist on being posted...just finally decided to post it to have something under my name besides sadness.......sigh |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
She sat down with a cup of coffee, and started to question where this thought might have come from and if there might be any others like it. She even worried over the possibility that just after she would start to cherish it, the previous owner would show up and reclaim it. I especially love this verse... perhaps in part because I've done just that. *S* The progression of this is fantastic... you give us smiles and leave us with such truth. *S* Well done! *S* |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well as poetry goes, this ain't much, but it insisted on being written lol thank you lady |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This is beyond fun - entertaining - creative and all sorts of yummy stuff. I enjoyed reading this very much.  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what an ending! you're good at those! |
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Daniel Storm Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 91New York |
Great metaphor. Makes realize why I eat when i wrote |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
I love the creativity in this! Well done! I have a few boxes around, too. Still feeding them... To the library-Full speed ahead! miscellanea |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
With your legs honey...you don't need to say a word!!!!!!!!!! well done sweetie |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I really enjoyed reading this, and it has a familiar ring to it. Also, it didn't short circuit my brain with superfluous thoughts on a day already gagging me from undigestable memories. LOL, I thank you, for this. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all......*smile* am glad to bring smiles.....and lol@ps and endings...this one just wanted to wander and wander, and the ending was what kept it from being finished....glad you liked |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Hi jellybeans. I know it has been a while since you posted this wonderful piece. But I closed my eyes and clicked at random to see where fate would take me and it brought me to thses words. LOVE THIS! Yes it is true some things are better left unsaid. That is really the trick...is it not? We must edit for our own ears each word we would speak. The gift of far sight must ever be ours so that our words do not come back to haunt us. I love this poem dear friend. Bravo...and it is getting bounced back to page one because it deserves another go-round. Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JellyGal~ And I am sitting here thankful for the wandering~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans I guess some things you just can't tame...I really enjoyed this! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: Yes. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all, this one was the end of a drought of words, and it seemed to want to drink them all...glad it made some sense and some smiles...seems I am thirsty again and lacking words...sigh |
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