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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana 
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I am… The space between sentences Tucked amidst what really matters I know protocol demands two And two might be more fitting To depict the volume of my lack But I’m just one…Just me. I am… A bell murmuring in stillness Stored away, forgotten Waiting for something to say When not even a breeze brushes it And songs of gladness Are mere memory I am… The unused side of a bed Serving no purpose Stretched out next to needed In a game of pretend Wearing the same soft blankets But reflecting rejection Not warm invitation I am… The endless pause After love words are spoken And reciprocation Isn’t offered When sounds can’t be snatched Back into unsaid And body won't drop Conveniently dead I am… An instrument unplayed In a deserted room My name’s hidden by dust And no melody’s made Only the steady, endless Staccato reminder that I am… |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sometimes I feel just like that too  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beautiful! Beautiful! In the past few weeks I've read much poetry, books published by a dozen or more poets....this better than any of them....the best, most moving piece I've seen in a long time. Laura, you really outdid yourself this time. ...and that label...I can almost make it out..."Antonio Str--" nope, can't quite read it...better dust off that instrument, it looks valuable.... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
THIS is exquisite writing!! A masterpiece for my library. Wonderfully penned. Hugs~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Did you mean to make me cry? Where WAS your hanky alert. suthern, my dear friend... this is a whole new slice of you. This is libraried, with a spotlight. Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ok I must say this is the best poem I have read this year......wow.......but.......... you forgot one 'I am' and that is "I am jellybeans best friend" ! I love you......and I am glad that you am  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You are... all things cherished upon the warming earth. all thoughts wondered in reflect. all words said in silent whisper..and, above all... You are a very talented lady! Well done. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SweetSuthernGal~ And when the next book is published, 'I am...' sure this one will be in it~  Beautifully done my friend~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, the spirit rejoices over what it has left. - Sufi epigram <))>< Email [email protected] |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
you are what you are then...enjoyed the collage of ideas |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"A bell murmuring in stillness" wow...very heartfelt and so full of ache |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Suthern beloved one, You are one incredibly special lady, your inner beauty is only matched by your ability to write sheer wonder. I do believe that this is one of your best ever poems, the feel of your soul is etched within these lines darling one. You are the light that shines Sunlight glinting on the waves Caressing each ripple Gifting each wave with its Golden beauteous glow You are the light that glows Warming my soul With a promise of home That warmth illuming All those who feel your touch You are the light And I am drawn ever To your glowing warmth Your loving light Truly this is exceptional writing beloved one I utterly, utterly love this poem by you Love you lady always as always Mushy   Tomorrow is another day I don't know what it holds |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This was so sad. I think everyone has felt this way at some time or another so it is easy to identify. Your analogies were really good and I can feel the pain. BUT, YOU ARE a beautiful soul, too. Don't forget that, sweet lady. ....jo |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
PS: I knew you'd understand. *S* Thank you! *S* Ratleader: Through the years, I have printed many poems, treasures to read again. THIS time, I print a response... to read when I wonder if I'm poet or merely pen-pusher. I can't thank you enough, my friend... but I thank you from the bottom of my heart. *S* Enchantress: You just added lustre to my smile... thank you so very much! *S* Sunshine: No, ma'am... I did not... forgive me? *S* Thank you very much, my friend... that spotlight gives such a warm glow. *S* jellybeans: You dear... that's one "I am" that I am so proud to claim! *S* Thank you so very much... I never expected such generous responses... but how I love them! *S* Magnus: That's beautiful. *S* Thank you so very much!!! *S* Marge: Shhhh... *S* You'll scare Ron with mention of another book! *S* Thank you so much... I'm so glad you like it! *S* ecrivan: I'm glad you enjoyed... thank you! *S* SEA: Thank you very much! *S* Marsha: Oh, lady... you are too good to me. *S* Thank you so much... your words are a gift. *S* iliana: I try not to... but it's tough. *S* Thank you so very much... for your kindness to both poem and poet! *S* |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
beautifull |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
you dear are so much to so many and on top of the list is me what a beautiful poem and what a beautiful person you are |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I know the feeling....the space between sentences..a bell that never rings....great write gal... |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
"I am… The unused side of a bed Serving no purpose Stretched out next to needed In a game of pretend Wearing the same soft blankets But reflecting rejection Not warm invitation" *sighs and big hugs* and then He created the horse... |
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sim0riah Member
since 2004-09-07
Posts 253Wyoming USA |
I agree with everyone else this is very, very wonderful...But you forgot one..Suthern You are Great!! sim0riah Only at night you can see the depth of the sun |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
MGROVES: Thank you! *S* hoot: You dear. *S* You touch me deeply with those kind words... thank you! *S* Toerag: I know you know... wish you didn't. *S* Thank you so much! *S* Skyfire: Thank you so much... for both the read and the hugs! *S* sim0riah: I appreciate your kind words so much... thank you! *S* |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
you are . . . enjoyed by all and sooo romantic! Rf |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Suthern So very well expressed....a wonderful portrait, but not complete...you forgot to say how beautiful your spirit is!!! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
suthern, Again, I am amazed how such perfect imagery could flow out of anyone's pen! You are a pretty incredible person! I'm glad we've had the chance to meet over the blue pages... Take care, Sweet Suthern, miscellanea K e E pE r!!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
OMG, Dear SUTHERN ~ I do believe you need some COMFORT! You forgot to put in that you are a friend to all, loving, sensitive, beautiful, creative... ~ and a phenomenal poetess!!! May your life be filled with the love that you so richly deserve! Love ya! Linda |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I AM still quite impressed with this piece. Find a publisher for it... Pronto! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
there are special forms for special ones, and you are that one significant special one....lovely as you are, your magnificance shines through this, listen to Sunshine...she's right! Do it! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Thank you all so very much... your kind and exceedingly generous responses truly humble me... Thank you! *S* |
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nn Member
since 2000-09-18
Posts 75 |
sheeshhhh....great! |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ruth, And I am amazed at how you write these days. Wonderful and poignant... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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