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Susan
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walking the surreal

0 posted 2004-09-02 02:04 AM



little girl performs
upon the stage
of others expectations
giving what they need
becoming what they see
but never quite knowing
who she is indeed-

costumed
in her mary janes
and pig tails . . .

trying to please
to tap the dance requested
and sing in perfect pitch
all the while-

her socks fall down
and the ruffles itch
and wouldn’t it be nice
to just exit
stage left?

s.a.t.

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

© Copyright 2004 s.a.t. - All Rights Reserved
passing shadows
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1 posted 2004-09-02 04:08 AM


well done
Susan
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2 posted 2004-09-02 11:59 AM


Thanks Dixie-

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Rick
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3 posted 2004-09-03 07:41 AM


Dear Susan, how true, we perform to the masses as expected, to do what we like would be wonderful. Great write here, full of such truth; enjoyed.
Be well and take care my friend.

Sincerely
Rick

Susan
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4 posted 2004-09-03 12:03 PM


Rick - thanks for your thoughtful reply- it would be nice, wouldn't it, not to have to perform.  That's what's nice about coming to a place like this, where feelings can flow freely

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

ShiningWindHaze
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5 posted 2004-09-06 08:29 AM


I know exactly how you feel, that perfect pitch in life. Everyone constantly watching to see if you're doing what they expect. In each of your poems I've read You've caught little pieces of my life in a beautiful web. I really can't fathom why or how this is. It just is and I can't help reading more of your works. If only souls could kiss. Innocent kisses of course. Mine to yours and innocent peck on the forehead.

Susan
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6 posted 2004-09-06 11:34 AM


In a way I am sorry one should truly understand this piece, and yet, to be understood, it is a comfort.

  Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

Magnus
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7 posted 2004-09-06 07:27 PM


So much put on a small and delicate soul,
trying ever hard to please and do it well.
Not knowing that just finishing the race
would be acceptable to many...

littlewing
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8 posted 2004-09-06 07:34 PM


Susan:

YES!

as I sit listening to Dylan
and reading you,
I am reminded of "Just Like A Woman."

becoming what they see
but never quite knowing
who she is indeed-




Mr_Brady's_Housekeeper
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9 posted 2004-09-06 07:48 PM


If we could only just let our hair down and be ourselves, without having to pretend, or perform what others want us to be. Lovely to read you.

Alice

shakespeare
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10 posted 2004-09-06 07:57 PM


Susan, really I don't know what to say.
U r really offering us good advice about our realistic soceity.
Thanx 4 u.
Best wishes.


Earth Angel
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11 posted 2004-09-06 08:05 PM


Susan, I would suggest that you stand up and curtsy for a job well done, but then that would be like you being on stage! ~ and that would defeat the purpose of your poem! lol

Big hug,
Linda


Kristabell
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12 posted 2004-09-06 08:12 PM


Wouldn't it though? Nice write!
Susan
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walking the surreal
13 posted 2004-09-06 09:10 PM


Thank you my dear friends.  I so appreciate your replies.  And hugs to you all-



Linda- it is good to see your name again, I've missed you.

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you.  Joy is a state of mind.

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