Open Poetry #33 |
You are a man, not a leaf |
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
We met eyes when the leaves reappeared; the trees blushed pink as they discovered their nudity, and i hold dearly now that first kiss, under the umbrella of the rain's promenade; the leaves masquerade, their colors, the collatoral as the trees lay the foundation; summer ends now; as the moon drifts between the somber branches, the tones of a new season about to inherit the nightsky; but you are a man not a leaf; i am a woman not a mapletree, and though you bled with love right through me, your myriad of color taking possession of my monochromatic heart, i am worn now with second guessing, watching your twists and turns through these kaleiodscope eyes, dazzled by the brilliance of your pallete, wishing now you could shed the superficial, realizing there is something to be said for the perpetual truth of the evergreen. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-31-2004 11:25 PM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
so full of imagery here, and a nice metaphor, dear inked goddess, I really do enjoy reading you |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang...love that last verse! |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
beautiful imagery loved it |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
God Michele, this is beautiful writing, as always and here you show a common duality we all relate to - at one time or another . . . your imagery is amazing . . . |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is such a beautiful poem, filled with vivid imagery and heartfelt thoughts. You've really written a classic here |
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bklynboy Senior Member
since 2002-12-15
Posts 660florida |
Wonder who this is written for? |
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PassionandFun Member
since 2003-07-30
Posts 60 |
Great write and excellent use of imagery as always! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Michele..this write has left me speechless... amazing talent you possess pretty lady! Hugs~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thanks for stopping by |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...I believe that some are leaves...as in leaving...James |
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