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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The sun brushes the treetops A day is done time for home I walk with no words or stops I am just a lump of gray stone, As I only pause to look to your window. The wind has a gentle blow Carrying the fragrance of closing bloom, Combs removed your hair flows Boldly down in your own room Unaware that anyone can see. I watch for a moment’s eternity Lost in dreams that are not mine Then enter into my stark reality With your vision in my mind Body old and tired from a hard day. It’s the only time I see her that way, Pure skin and unwound hair, For she is someone else in the day, A different lovely than when there Away from the streets and the shops. Gloom Inspirited by “T’zu – Yeh” songs from the Chinese Sung Dynasty (960-1279) |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
absolutely beautiful...you make writing poems an art...very much enjoyed. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Breath takingly beautiful, Professor. One of your best yet. Wish I could comment more, but at a word loss miscellanea |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, A good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I enjoy your writings very much, you are very good at this ya know!  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I do admire your translations and the ability to make the poems your own M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
makes me think about how many faces we wear during the day it's good to come home and be able to be real |
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Copperbell Senior Member
since 2003-11-08
Posts 956 |
I enjoy learning about the things you've been reading. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's so hard to say "this is now my favorite" because so many pieces of your poetry would fill a book that would make Rumi jealous. But there was a special vision about this, Sir, that stirred my very well. I thank you for that. |
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