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We Lose Us (for Sue)
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We Lose Us (for Sue) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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The Moon (she's dead?) dry and drift burst reflected on a dime dot my eyes and cross the breeze leaving streaks of tears and sighs down upon the children-cheek once in upward purity standing with an innocence of the mouth too wide - again wishing it would snow... *written in response to littlewing's eloquence: /pip/Forum90/HTML/001967.html * |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome! yes! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
It's that simple... it's that complex. Kudos, K |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
dot my eyes and cross the breeze leaving streaks of tears and sighs smiles, tremendous visions and response Enjoyed |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Overflowing talent,  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity You're both so lovely!  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
 smiling at you....well done K! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
OMG you are completely insane! (but I know this already and still I proceed) Karen . . . God you know this is becoming a childrens book here . . . I am so serious . . . I was just reading to Billy and all the books are happy and giddy and so Partridge Family, needless to say he started getting bored (he is MY child afterall) *grin* Anyhow . . . this is the perfect twin to what I wrote, I mean I showed innocence and here, it has been taken away . . . of the mouth too wide - again and we both have written in the simplest sense which magnifies the meaning and actually we didnt even really mean to write any of this with goes right along with the beautiful innocence of children and how we lose that sight even after begging for it . . . searching and hoping for it - especially if you once KNEW it and lost it . . . I often wonder how different I may be - you know? Now you have me on a rampage here . . . lol - geez I still feel like that a lot too . . . we found us --->> birth we lose us ---->> life (or do we lose ourselves with birth?) It is beautiful Lady K and I thank you for this and for you and Thank God that you understand me (God knows few do) you helped me to better understand what I wrote . . . you are a gift . . .  |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Serenity, THis is incredible writing that explains the feeling perfectly. Your talent overwhelms me! a definite keeper again miscellanea |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all, for reading and to Susie for the inspiration. And *chuckling* Susie? Last time I read a sentence such as the one in your reply it was written by someone named "doreen."  Hugs to all. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
gee thanks K is that good or bad now?. . . exiting quickly . . . |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling, it's a GOOD thing. In fact, I owe her an e mail!  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ser, your unique style adds so much to the power of your written words. Well done girl! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Karen -- a perfect contrast!  ..jo |
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