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Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

0 posted 2004-08-30 05:44 PM

Your laconic smile met my transparent gaze
across the supermarket aisleway.
I responded with a simple straightforward
"Wie geht’s?"

Never one to mince words,
you simply shrugged your broad shoulders
and turned your full attention back
to your favorite pastime:
shoving all the ripe fruit aside,
searching for the firm, not-yet-ready stuff.

And in that very small moment,
you caught sight of your reflection
in the shiny polished weighing basket,
and frowned;
not unlike the frown I wore,
when I cared.

MARK V SHELDON
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

1 posted 2004-08-30 05:59 PM

SMACK! Wow, Kacy -- this one hits home with great metaphors and imagery. Especially the last line. Tight and powerful.

-MVS

You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml

[This message has been edited by MARK V SHELDON (08-30-2004 07:26 PM).]

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

2 posted 2004-08-30 06:05 PM

Es geht sehr gut, danke. *S* Aber nein, nicht hier.

This is a gut-puncher, lady... and an excellent one!!!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2004-08-30 06:14 PM

Mark, smack? LOL, OK, here comes one

gut? danke, and yes, it just might be a gut puncher (glad it's not me in either persona)

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

4 posted 2004-08-30 07:28 PM

Oh wow...!!

Eric

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

5 posted 2004-08-30 08:43 PM

Pass the smilies over here too... What Mark
said in spades! Splendidly written, very
well done.

kayjay
Member Elite

since 2002-06-24

Posts 2015
Oregon

6 posted 2004-08-30 08:50 PM

The sorrow of lost love finds everyone's SP! You write of ordinary scenes with uncommon insight. Always a pleasure to read you. Ken

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

7 posted 2004-08-31 02:13 AM

Eric, thanks for that reply.

Magnus, thanking you, too

It was a begged-to-be-written kind of thing.

Ken, thanking you, for always gifting me with the kindest, most generous reply.

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2004-08-31 03:58 AM

dang

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

9 posted 2004-08-31 08:40 AM

quote:
It was a begged-to-be-written kind of thing.

The best kind!

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

10 posted 2004-09-04 06:07 PM

Such a snapshot! What a great description of a moment. Loved it, Kacy!

....jo

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