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msflame
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0 posted 2004-08-28 08:40 PM


A curve, not blocked with
color, rests within a pale shape
of a valley where I lived for many years.

The air smells of white willow
and Blue Cypress.

Smoky Mountain shadows lengthen;
no one hears the steel clamps
around my legs, I stumble, fall

and hold myself beneath
red checked kettles that pour
out a happy man's tears.

He is lifted above me;
there was love once, now a
bruised shadow lengthens

when blue shades
that finish lonely, usher in midnight.
we make love, until I sigh above a whisper,
and reach for the doves no one sees
except me.

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iliana
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1 posted 2004-08-29 12:58 PM


Penny -- I really enjoy your writing.  ....jo
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2 posted 2004-08-29 11:38 AM


Penny~
I find so much to like about your thoughts~

'when blue shades
that finish lonely, usher in midnight'


So creatively original~
Thank you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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3 posted 2004-08-29 02:47 PM


I see so many interpretations in this, Penny...so many layers of knowledge and understanding.
msflame
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4 posted 2004-08-29 03:12 PM


Well, you're all super and thank you. I wanted this to be a deep thinker (even though I really am not
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