Open Poetry #33 |
That Is Me |
Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
The Forest.. cool, inviting, mysterious. Do not be fooled by the colors of me. The reds, the browns, the yellows. Look deep, see the shadows? That is me. The dark beneath the light. The deepness of my shallow bright. Reflections of the shades of night. That is me. The Ocean.. soft, warm, welcoming. Do not be awed by the shades of me. The blues, the teals, the greens. Experience the depths of fear. That is me. The dispair beneath the surface. The terror that has a purpose. The strength you deem as worthless. That is me. The Sky... vast, open, calming. Do not be deceived by the twilight of me. The orange, the pinks, the purples. Understand the spirit. That is me. The motion that is constant. The space of me thats vacant. Age that makes me patient. That is me. Remember me with a smile on your face, or please don't remember me at all. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
OH Yes.... Do not be deceived by the twilight of me. The orange, the pinks, the purples. Understand the spirit. That is me. The motion that is constant. The space of me thats vacant. Age that makes me patient. That is me. I very much needed to read these words this morning. So much lies within, beneath, and beyond your words... This is just perfect! I'm keepin it. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ohhhh, how beautiful this was, genuine and so honest...This I loved, very much...but this part The strength you deem as worthless. That is me. How could anyone deem strength as worthless? You are not nor never will be so...but more so, your sight and poetic inspiration gives you signficance, no one will ever come close to matching you...and he was very very lucky to know you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
pretty write |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lucie, Mother Nature, encompassed. Well done! |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thank you all for your kind replies.. this was one of those that just spills forth from the soul. No thought, no reasoning, just there. I love these!!!! Remember me with a smile on your face, or please don't remember me at all. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
ohhh boy, now I'm embarrased and I clearly see the concept you were going with this, that's what I get for reading way to quickly dahhhh...sorry bout that, but even so, in my book, your a brilliant poet...excuse senility if you will...hehhehee |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lucie A delightful you, enjoyed. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Very nice write gal....now c'mon down yonder to Alabama and lets get nekkid and hit off this still....ya wanna? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Enjoyed this and its depths. Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
So sad, so sad. Strength can be deamed worthless. It is all in the metaphors in some poetry. Very honest and straight forward. You wrote well. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucie~ What a lovely piece~ So very, very nice to see you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Boy if I didn't understand the spirit of what makes her, my day would surely be empty. It is SO nice to see you posting again, don't go away now y'all hear? Lovely piece Lucie. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I enjoyed everything about this one |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I love the looking past of layers in this... and how it leaves you with a beautiful ache. Very good... Always, Alyssa Poems are made by fools like me, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW! what a cool write Lucie. It IS you. |
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Margot Member
since 2003-10-04
Posts 154 |
Thought provoking Margot Love is something eternal, The aspect may change, But not the essence.- Vincent Van Gogh |
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