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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-08-06 09:06 PM

This moon that greets me;

has it been defeated, as it
pales faintly, a dying wish
within the light of morning,

or does it hang,relentless
as this badge of pain
i proudly wear,in the hopes
of your reappearance.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (08-06-2004 11:50 PM).]

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

1 posted 2004-08-06 10:12 PM

A different style for you...becoming...
I have noticed that time is stretched to accomodate the prophecies.
Hugs,
TD

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

2 posted 2004-08-06 10:32 PM

This a great read.
I liked it.

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

3 posted 2004-08-06 11:16 PM

A potent and seamless construct here ma'am. The imagery of the moon disappearing in the morning sun paints a vivid picture of fading hope. A plaintive entreatment.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2004-08-07 12:45 PM

understand this well

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

5 posted 2004-08-07 12:52 PM

Your words dance in the moonlight, suspending the reader in thought.

Keep your eyes open girlie, it will come again and shine on you, no doubt.

Hugs Michele~

iliana
Member Patricius

since 2003-12-05

Posts 13434
USA

6 posted 2004-08-07 03:46 AM

Geeez, what is it about today, Inkedgoddess?! I'm feeling the same way and I think it must be something in the stars. Putting that aside, great poem...obviously, I felt it.

....jo

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

7 posted 2004-08-07 06:58 AM

"a dying wish
within the light of morning"

great line!

great poem!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2004-08-07 07:56 AM

The moon pales in beauty to your poetic soul...

EA

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

9 posted 2004-08-07 08:27 AM

to all of you dear poets

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2004-08-07 10:19 AM

I enjoyed your thoughts immensely Michelle,
but this line here

a dying wish
within the light of morning

pure perfection. Well done lady poet,
and hugs to you.

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

11 posted 2004-08-07 10:36 AM

Very poignant-

Susan

Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind.

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