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Bad Wrap |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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~*~ In conversation I came across the truth when I said I don't ever want to get to that point where I can so easily move on from one to another. In reply, she said, that's why "they" don't understand you, it's the way of comings and goings and the sheer delight of fantasy. So I read your poems over and cried for the last time, then I fed them to a shredder and watched them turn into confetti. Perhaps I will use them to send a package, marked fragile and no one will ever know the contents or the care I took. Make no mistake, one side of the paper is floral and fussy and the other is a fallacy, I should have known. But if the world is all a stage, you deserve the leading role and a lady who will follow your lead with her eyes closed, then bring you to your knees all over again. Then your play will become a reality but it won't be me tossing roses from the balcony. In truth, I came upon what I have always known and gave to you unconditionally. I didn't set the stage or try to put you in a box or edit my feelings to suit your needs. You're a class act all right, however heartless. A two bit comedy, out to serve yourself and I'm not laughing at your tired punch line, nor do I deserve the bad wrap. ~*~ |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
you tell him !!! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
"But if the world is all a stage, you deserve the leading role and a lady who will follow your lead with her eyes closed, then bring you to your knees all over again. Then your play will become a reality but it won't be me tossing roses from the balcony." Bluesy, powerful poem! I thought it outstanding!!!  ....jo |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Bluesy, I feel so sad that you've been in such a situation. This aches. I ache for you. Stay assertive and cool, Lady. Stick to your guns. Sorry about the bad wrap. The bright side is that your poetry is very good. Why is it always that way, that broken hearts make great poetry? sadelite |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Women are survivors, Bluesy! We simply always and forever survive because we're made that way. We're also made to be giving and loving and should never wish that not to be no matter what the circumstances. What would have been different if you had known? You would simply not have had a wonderful experience and would be less than you are today. And the heartache, like all things, simply passes away with time. How much time is always unknown ... until it is known. Take care! |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
excellantly written. and i do understand |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well Said Ms Blues. You go girl! Maree. The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 what spunk! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done ma'am... |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bluezy..that tai-bow stuff is lookin good on you...keep kickin babe you will always win |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I'm all done blowning off steam, I think. Thanks for all your good thoughts, even when I don't deserve them. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Not so fast there Lori... You do deserve the caring support of your PIP friends.. And, lets talk about your writing here... you guide the reader through with great alacrity across this resolvescape... its like a stream of consciousness -- totally off the cuff, cogent, agile, vigilant, and, there's nothing wrong with being groucy, critical, and peevish -- it's just what the subject matter is... It may be a Bad Wrap -- but, a great package!  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I can see who is in control here, and it is NOT him...great write and good job on the taking care of yourself effort. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Careful consideration doesn't always work both ways, sometimes we give more than we receive, but I'm not saying I didn't receive more than I gave either... it's hard to say. Thank you Reb for taking the time to leave your thoughtful reply, it means a great deal to me. And thank you Barry for your encouraging words, even if this does read a little out of control, I'm all the better for knowing where the truth lies. Life is a mixed bag and there's no telling when the heartache will come, but that was yesterday, and yesterday's gone. Hugs, and all that~ |
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