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Her Nightmare Her Dream
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Her Nightmare Her Dream |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Nowhere to run In terror she stank Tears of fear making her weak Cowering in the dark and dank Streaked dirt on her cheeks As the tormentor still seeks To batter her once more Striking her fetal form As done time and time before Causing flow of red and warm To drip to her bed of rubbish From the constant paining That never seems to vanish Despite the cruel maiming Nowhere to run For a torment never done. Fields of spring flowers With sweetness that overpowers She combs her golden hair And places white flowers there, A couple behind each ear. No sound echoes too loud Quiet as a passing cloud Across the meadow she floats In a ribbons and petticoats In a place she doesn’t share. Gloom |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Beautifully done, Gloomy One.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Susan Caldwell, You are kind in your praise Gloom |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
wow! read twice, still wow! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, You know you can learn to control a dream. Enjoyed the write. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Love the contrast here. The first verse was driven with intensity, the second cooling in your word stream. Excellent transition. Very much enjoyed. miscellanea |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, MGROVES, Pleased you enjoyed Thank you, Seymour, I’ve never been able to control them, Just the words that describe. Thank you, miscellanea, Always a pleasure to please, Duality and transitions are familiar subjects. Gloom |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Such stark contrast in the two stanzas. Much enjoyed....and I agree, some dreams can be changed!  ....jo |
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Startime55 Member Elite
since 2003-04-05
Posts 2148Alberta, Canada |
I agree with seymour, I control my dreams otherwise the past would forever haunt me...Incredible writing... very powerfull |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Nowhere to run... except maybe into dreams...wanting them to come true Nice... M |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Powerful imagery! Enjoyed. JL  |
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