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peaceful_dreamer Member
since 2003-04-25
Posts 159SoMeWhErE oVeR tHe RaInBoW |
I don't understand why I hold back, why sometimes I cry, and other times I laugh. I don't understand why and feel full and happy, but when I cry I feel lost and empty. I've never flown, so I never really fell, I've never died (inside) so I haven't seen hell. I've never left, so I can't return, I'm looking back, but have yet to turn. I don't understand what my "world" expects. I was made with flaws - I'm not perfect. I don't understand why I lived in a lie, When I knew it would multiply. I've never soared, so I never really fell, I've never departed this life, so I haven't seen hell. I've never left, so I can't return, I'm glancing back, but have yet to turn. I don't understand why I'm blind to reality, why I dream of secluded insanity. I don't understand why I'm afraid of the untouched, and why I won't allow myself to grow up. I've never fallen, because I won't let myself fly. I've never seen hell, because I've never died (inside). I will never come back, I will never learn, that even though I'm looking back, I can't return. "I'm just me, trapped in a body." |
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Paper Tiger Member
since 2003-09-28
Posts 77 |
Every paragraph seemed too similar for my liking. There is some direction, but I think you could do much better. We see much, observe little, and perceive less. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Sometimes we don't understand everything, but in time answers come. Very well written. |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
This was so good (would make a good song, I think, too). Now, back up to the top you go! ....jo |
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