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gothicmoth
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since 2000-06-05
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0 posted 2000-06-09 02:54 PM


and what
does one say to that?
the cognescenti
unaware
aether runes
hieroglyphs in invisible ink
imaginary spectors
cannot haunt
live in terror
of not being
misunderstood
cartouches etched out
circling
false prophesy
closing eyes
on knowledge
baring soul
first to weep
erroneously

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JP
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1 posted 2000-06-09 03:08 PM


Okay, I'm getting it.... let's have some more please...

 Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP


Portia
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since 2000-05-18
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2 posted 2000-06-09 03:23 PM


I don't know what to say to this. So much is open... there is a lot of darkness here, loneliness... but I have to have a little hope in the last lines, "first to weep / erroneously." I have wept erroneously, only to find my heart reopened again. I hope that's somewhere in the speaker's future.
gothicmoth
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3 posted 2000-06-09 03:28 PM


What if the speaker isn't speaking about themselves?

[This message has been edited by gothicmoth (edited 06-09-2000).]

Portia
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4 posted 2000-06-09 03:49 PM


Perhaps, slowly, realization will dawn for the subject? But since the subject is "closing eyes / on knowledge / baring soul," s/he is probably a talker not a listener, and to "live in terror / of not being / misunderstood" points to the subject inventing their own pain, "imaginary spectors," etc.

This is a very good portrait of a not-so-straight thinker. I know a couple people like that... too bad you can't grab them by the shoulders, shake them and say "Smell the coffee already!!"

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