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sweetthing61401
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since 2000-06-07
Posts 8


0 posted 2000-06-08 01:28 PM


He laid a kiss
Upon her brow
He placed a rose
In her hand
Once again he tells her
He loves her forever
He will always love her
Until the end of time
He looks in her hand
At the single white rose
A symbol of his undying love
Unlike that rose
It will never wilt and fade
He looks at her sweet lips
Which he will never kiss again
He watches the lid close
On his loves resting bed
He says his last goodbye
A single tear falls from his eye
Now his beloved will rest forever


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JP
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343
Loomis, CA
1 posted 2000-06-08 02:38 PM


Eloquent and tender.  I liked image of love everlasting which you have conveyed.  Although I am not one for self-promotion (not BLATANT self-promotion anyway) I am reminded of a poem I posted called Patiently Waiting.  Let me 'resurrect' that guy and post him. I think the two would compliment each other.

 Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.
JP


Jeremiah Johnson
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since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S
2 posted 2000-06-08 04:14 PM


This is a good poem. it seems like a reversed sleeping beauty story. but good never the less. but you can tell even everlasting love dies out in one world only to be taken to the next.
amazon_lover
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
3 posted 2000-06-08 04:20 PM


Hi sweetie
It was sad. Love will not perish with death atleast thats sure. One will always live in the heart and minds of that person. Strikingly beautiful poem.
SIncerely
A_L

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
4 posted 2000-06-08 07:23 PM


A loving tribute to a love that will go one, though one no longer lives. Very good.. I got choked up!
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
5 posted 2000-06-08 09:31 PM


The final parting moment is so sad.. it is so hard to say goodbye...  I admit being choked up a bit myself, I hate the final physical goodbye...  But they do live in heart and memory.
Beautifully and sensitively written  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



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