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Jonas
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since 2000-03-03
Posts 796
Oregon

0 posted 2000-06-07 12:29 PM


Other Side

He watches himself
from across the room.
His body lies on the bed,
bleeding it's last

Strange awareness,
seeing himself this way.
Detached, yet interested.
Is this how it is?

His body, in twisted sheets,
breathes a final gasp.
He suddenly smiles,
and walks into the mirror.

6/6/00
Gary Pence

© Copyright 2000 Gary - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-06-07 03:22 PM


~Hhmmm,....very interesting poem.  Chilling and creatively thought out.  Thank you for sharing. Take care. *Peace.
Isis
Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
2 posted 2000-06-08 12:05 PM


Ahh Gary but what is in the mirror?  Another reality, heaven, hell?  Interesting stuff  

 I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn.....
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Barbie
Junior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 39

3 posted 2000-06-08 02:14 AM


Wow! What visual language!

 

Barbie
Junior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 39

4 posted 2000-06-08 02:14 AM


Wow! What visual language!

 

Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
5 posted 2000-06-08 01:59 PM


Jonas,
  I liked this poem lots. You have let us know with so few words, 1John 3:14;("We know we have passed from death unto life, because we love the brethren.")and StJohn 5:24; ("..;but is passed from death unto life.")

Very encouraging words you have given us in this lovely poem, as the subject smiled.Good job and thank you for this one, my friend.
Marcy

"He suddenly smiles,
and walks into the mirror."

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