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| Dark Poetry #1 |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Try doors closed tightly locked bolted protecting her keeping evil at bay secret songs deafly play drowning evil's hate purple tears slip slide out fear behind the eyes behind the door the lock the evil screams escape terrified lungs throat dry burning trying lights dying dark beyond the music beyond the dream the evil behind the door fighting eager to win eager to gain to lessen her to overpower to control to teach to invade to steal and mame and hack and swallow and taste and hate and leave to cry to wonder to guilt to deserve to brake to fall to try to be her before the evil entered. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Spit Fire, Great poem, my friend!! I love the format you used......perfect for this!!!  Evil should always be kept at bay... LW Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
so vivid and real. thank you. you help me try once again. kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
This is really oppressive. As Spitfire said, the shape of the poem already conveys this. Love it. Uta Lotharingia "Wir wollen nicht Wert und Sinn ... wir wollen Unwert und Unsinn" Raoul Hausmann |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~LW,...thanks for reading friend.  . Yeah, it should be and I try. Take care.~Kynder,...thank you for taking the time...and for the words. I appreciate it. Take care. ~Lotharingia,...oppressive,..yeah..I know...sheesh. Thank you for reading and repyling.....and for ???loving it. Thanks. *Peace. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
The picture the format shows answers and fixes all doesn't it? Great and interesting stuff her hon, well worth whatever effort and time you put into it!! I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey Isis,...thanks for responding. This one actually just fell out of my mouth...like throwing up my thoughts...ya? The format just happened too...stange it made a pic....oh well. cool. Thanks for reading and taking the time. *Peace. |
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Jeffyf Junior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 49Muncie, IN |
Short phrases, short words, it all makes sense. I see this as saying we have to make many attempts and try every time. It doesn't matter how hard we try, so long as it's our hardest. I think it's great. Tell me if this is totally different from what you saw it as. Wonderful job, spit. Jeffrey |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Jeffrey,...thank you so much for reading. But before I tell the story of this I'd like to wait for Joel to read...I have faith he's not ignoring this...but merely out of town...so to speak. Hehe. Anyway,...yeah...a constant trying. Thanks again friend...for taking the time to read. . *Peace. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I thought I had replied to this one last night but it seems to be missing, ah well! here we go again! This one brings forth feelings of uneasyness and apprehension. Interesting indeed! Love the format too!. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Phew....left breathless from this one. Though glad I read it. The format is excellent it reads very well. Glad there were no commas. Excellent poem. ------------------------ "I've been too honest with myself I should have lied like everybody else"-Richey Edwards "Take nothing but pictures. Leave nothing but footprints. Kill nothing but time". Baltimore Grotto "Libraries gave us power Then work came and made us free What price now for a shallow piece of dignity" Nicky Wire, A design for Life. manic street preachers "Rock 'n' roll is our epiphany Culture, alienation, boredom and despair" "To be nobody-but-yourself-in a world which is doing its best night and day, to make you everybody else - means to fight the hardest battle which any human being can fight; and never stop fighting." E.E Cummings. |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Sounds like you have a great big beast hidden somewhere, not one I'd want to mess with, To keep it at bay, you must keep trying, in whatever you do. keep a chain on it, or it might get the best of you. But sometimes you can use it to do things inside. know what I mean. ues the power it posses to do good within not let it use you, in the trying you can overcome. love you kid. Joel I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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