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starboards
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since 1999-10-14
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longwood, florida

0 posted 2000-05-19 03:21 PM



I had to do it
it was killing me inside
I thought I would feel better
but now I know it was better to hide

You ran out the door
and into the street
you didnt come back
so i had to speak

"It was a stupid mistake!"
I screamed into the night
but I never heard a sound
nor saw any light

I didnt know what to do
without you I had died inside
my only solution:
Suicide

I drove to your house
I prepared the rope
I tied it around my neck
as I dropped the note:

"As you read this
please remember me
Im the one who loved you
Im the one hanging in the tree

Your heart belonged to me
and to you I was untrue
I never ment to hurt...
this is the best that I can do...

I wanted to show you
how I felt inside
My only solution:
Suicide



 "Falling in love is just that - falling.
Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe.
Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees.
But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die."

© Copyright 2000 Ashley Keenan - All Rights Reserved
MagnoliaBlue
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since 2000-05-12
Posts 367

1 posted 2000-05-19 07:08 PM


This is sad.
It's no way to apologize and it's not a solution, for anything.

You go to the person(or send a note) and you say," I made a mistake and I am very sorry."
The person either accepts your apology or they don't.

Don't mess up a lot of lives, just because you made a mistake.This would be the last mistake and one you couldn't apologize for.

God Bless.

MagnoliaBlue

dhuron
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since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

2 posted 2000-05-19 07:11 PM


I agree with MagnoliaBlue,

That is no way at all...it is a cowards way out and cause so very, oh so very much more harm hurt and pain.  If they can't forgive you for what was done, then it wasn't meant to be...fate has a way of dealing us what we think a fatal blow, but really it is what must be to preserve us from future pain...



starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
3 posted 2000-05-20 09:45 AM


thanks guys but once again let me remind u that these arent my true feelings...i just wrote the poem because i wanted to...i would never think of killing myself for mistakes that i have done...but anyways thanks again!



 "Falling in love is just that - falling.
Sometimes you merely trip and stub your toe.
Sometimes you fall to your hands and knees.
But sometimes you smack your head against the pavement and die."

Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
4 posted 2000-05-20 06:55 PM


I felt this poem very much.
I found a man in a tree once in the hills
he made a great show of his knots and abilities in tying his rope, but he forgot to allow for springing action from the tree lim, it took a long time.
very graphic your poem and my memories.
Joel.

 I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

starboards
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since 1999-10-14
Posts 467
longwood, florida
5 posted 2000-05-22 09:15 AM


thanks! Im so sorry u had to find someone in a tree...a horrible way to die to say the least! thanks again for replying...

ashley

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