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Dark Poetry #1

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NamelessOne
Member

since 2000-04-09

Posts 197
Biloxi MS

0 posted 2000-05-07 05:53 PM

Giddy
lifted
colors brighter
mind clear
smell the night
out of purposeless coma
FIGHT
eyes alive
draw in the air
head held high
sound of your own laughter
to the heavens fly
finally alive
spells are broken
slapped by the hand of life
no warnings spoken
good to be alive again

[This message has been edited by NamelessOne (edited 05-07-2000).]

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-05-07 06:02 PM

~Powerful post,...it IS like that at times eh? I like this....sounds like a great feeling. Well said!!!

nathan
New Member

since 2000-05-07

Posts 6
colorado springs, CO

2 posted 2000-05-07 08:57 PM

wow--great work, captivating to the end...Carpe Diem!!

Alle'cram
Senior Member

since 2000-02-28

Posts 1816
Texas

3 posted 2000-05-08 01:05 AM

I liked this one a lot. Powerful! mm

Joel the wolf
Senior Member

since 2000-04-06

Posts 1333
Angels Camp

4 posted 2000-05-08 02:12 AM

Sounds like someone had a brush with Mr. death? "purposeless coma" The colors are brighter, the mind becomes clear with life, the smells are so much more.
The eye's are better, and the air smells great with life also.
Joel.

I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

5 posted 2000-05-08 02:47 PM

Nameless~ sounds almost like leaving a bad relationship, at any rate- fantastic!

-SEA

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