Dark Poetry #1 |
~Don't~ |
BlueEyez666 New Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 9 |
~Don't~ don't hold me don't love me please just hate if you hate then maybe i won't love you leave me forget me if you se me tremble just keep walking on by if you see me cry just don't look in my eyes don't see my pain don't love me for i'll burn you i'll tear you open for this horrid world to see wultures will surely devour oyu don't leave your heart for me to hold for i just might squeeze too tight just hate me just forget me no more memories they have been earsed comfortably numb heart was made of glass and left on a shelf now it has cracked fallen to the floor it shattered it was bound to end life was just a test of your innner strength which i had none... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
NO! you have inner strength because you wrote this. It hurts to feel shattered and if this was a personal experience, I know the feeling. Keep writing Kathleen [email protected] |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
No kid you have the strength, and you have put up walls, in this reading. Anyway this is a really great poem, it shows power inside. Wolves do this to ward off potential suitors in the pack. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this...reminding me of an old kind of song called "Honey don't...say you will when you won't...on no honey don't. James |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
good work... well written and i agree with irish rose If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Hey little blue one don't be so blue stop with this wall you will only block the sun and eventually you won't shine. Knock that wall down let the sun shine in and you will begin to emerge as a beautiful ray of golden light I'd like to see that Luv Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
I can feel your pain here, and see your love. We've all been there, and yes, someday you will move on, you are stronger than you realize. Keep writing, keep loving, take care "Love is the only drug you can take that will convince you each time that you've never had it before." ~author unknown~ |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
Simply Wonderful I feel the pain and know it too well. Joel is right, you need to put up walls to protect yourself. Strength is there, just not often seen by yourself..but others have pointed it out. |
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Seysi New Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 8kortrijk in belgium |
it's fantastic that's all i can say without sounding sentimental! |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
BE~ this is great! I really liked this! You have more strength than you realize. -SEA |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Did you write this for me I wonder? I relate to every line. This is was bittersweet piece to read, but it is so very well expressed and written. Your pain comes through with every line, and please listen to Irish Rose. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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