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My wall.......... |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas 
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Damn this wall that surrounds me That protects me from the pain I built it many years ago And now I take the blame It use to help me wake each day And see the glory of the light Now I stand alone in my world With nothing more in sight Damn this wall that surrounds me I want to make it go away No one wants to climb it Or fight it each and every day It keeps me locked in this hole For no one else to see The pain and misery I feel Oh why does it have to be Damn this wall that surrounds me I want to feel the love once more For someone to get close to me And open up this door Hand me a hammer, a saw, an axe I want so badly to break through Just to feel his arms around me And to feel the love so true Damn this wall that surrounds me I yearn to be set free Tired of this loneliness My tear stained face that has come to be So here I sit and cry Not knowing where I should be Tired of this darkness Damn this wall that surrounds me!!! I do not love you for being perfect..... I love you for being perfect for me!! |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
This poem puts me back 21/2 years ago, I had put myself into the deepest/darkest hole I could find, with unclimbable walls. I didn't think there was a way out "ever". So that's when I started to write. I found out that they can't climb in you must climb out. Use your writings to latter upon, take a step up, soon you will be over the walls. this is a great poem, and a great way of saying ?? I'm ready. Love ya kid. haha Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I could feel your emotion in this poem...makes it a great post. Keep letting it out...  |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Break down the walls hon, just like Joel said, inch by inch, brick by brick, open your world to love again, it's worth the battle scars to find true love! *hugs* and strength to you my friend  A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
oh yeah the tears flowed on this one. i wish i could say i can see you behind those walls, but i can't climb over mine either... what to do, what to do.... i guess write on... thank you. kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Swåmp¤Faerÿie Member
since 2000-03-29
Posts 358Illinois |
been there,done that....and i'm still stuck in my black lagoon...oh well... It's hard to tell if building boundaries around yourself hurts or helps....sometimes they do both,either way it's a pain in the butt. But this is an excellent poem,i really love this forum...it's the best. swamp And there she weaves by night and day, a magic web of colours gay.~Tennyson |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
You have described my situation perfectly in this poem, I know all too well the pain that you are expressing. Well written and a bittersweet read for me. Unfortunately, I have no advice to give to you upon tearing the walls down because I have yet to do so too. I do hope that you take Joel's advice however. I wish you the best! Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow. Say's it all, doesn't it. Good, passionate howl. I really like the line "Damn this wall that surrounds me!" I think that could qualify by itself as one of the best and shortest poems ever. Stay with it.... j. |
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Scarlet Lady Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 242Midwest |
Isn't part of the wall coming down that we must first realize it is there?? I think you see these walls now so plainly, feel it's weight, and feel the helplessness to tear it down yourself? I can relate with you.....I believe these walls fall when we get beyond "our" ability to keep them standing any longer. Great poem you've shared with us, with lot's of hard hitting truth! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed reading this...you built the wall and you are the one that gets to tear it down...you need now only choose the method..as you say hammer, saw, and ax. If you're in a hurry try some dynamite. Reminded me of the day when they started tearing down the Berlin wall. James |
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Jesse Jaymz Senior Member
since 2000-01-24
Posts 708Youngstown, ohio |
it took me awhile to find this poem but i am glad i did. this is so true. i built such a wall that i couldnt see who really cared about me. and now it is to late to go back. i hope one day i can tear it all down. or have someone help me. great work my friend. i wish i could tear down that wall for you. Do you bury me when I’m gone? Do you teach me while I’m here? Just as soon as I belong, Then it’s time I disappear... MetallicA "I disappear" |
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