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kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida

0 posted 2000-04-25 10:47 AM


I thought if I listened to him,
I would also be heard.

I thought if I was there for him,
I would prove myself loyal.

I thought if i shared my heart,
He wouldn't punch through yet
Another gaping hole.

Shows what I know,
Standing here with my Swiss cheese soul.


*****kynder

  The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson

© Copyright 2000 Kynder - All Rights Reserved
kittyj
Junior Member
since 2000-04-17
Posts 32
CANADA
1 posted 2000-04-25 01:14 PM


Why are the rules always different for them?  Things we agree on being unspeakably horrible, suddenly are being done to us by the same person who at one time would have spit on that type of behaviour.  It is craziness!  It is unfair, and horrible, and they will do it again and again, while we sit and try to make some sense of it.  

I will stand there with ya girl.  This poem cuts right through, leaving no questions.  Good work sweetie.

Joel the wolf
Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
2 posted 2000-04-25 05:29 PM


kynder your on a roll. Good to have you back again.
this is in with your last post?
the same subject?
any way this is a very good post also.
Joel.

 I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel.

kristi
Junior Member
since 2000-04-24
Posts 33
Yulee, FL
3 posted 2000-04-26 12:16 PM


I really liked it.  It really hit home.
AVANTI
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
4 posted 2000-04-26 01:52 AM


well this was short but hitting...definately

 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

NamelessOne
Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197
Biloxi MS
5 posted 2000-04-27 02:23 AM


Very nice ...i liked it  
dhuron
Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476

6 posted 2000-04-27 09:27 PM


Kynder

Oh this is way to close to my feelings right now.  I thought If I was there, always there giving myself to help. But no, I too was wrong and am left while the ruins of my heart and soul. Wonderful Job, you've expressed it so very well...

Damn Life is painful, but have hope for that is the only thing that lasts...

Irish Rose
Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

7 posted 2000-04-27 09:31 PM


you really know how to relate don't you!!! I've felt this way, you give and give, and you feel wounded....
very good piece, very honest

 Kathleen


Lady Bere
Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 73
Valmeyer, Illinois USA
8 posted 2000-04-27 09:35 PM


Great poem!  It does hit home for me as well.  Thank you for the poetic expression of my emotional state.


 Without darkness there is no light
Without the light we cannot see the dark
Balance...It heals the soul -- by: LB


kynder
Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537
Tallahassee, Florida
9 posted 2000-04-28 04:14 AM


wow, it amazes me that so few words can explain so many hearts.  such a shame isn't it?  all these loving people here, you would think there were more of us out there... shows what i know!! lol  

making it anyway
kynder
Psalm 27

  The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson

tracie66
Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
Australia
10 posted 2000-04-28 07:17 AM


Kynder~
What a gem of a poem   Loved it.

Shows what I know....
Standing here with my swiss chees soul  
Tracie~


 Keep all the windows of your mind open
Anne Rooks


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