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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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~Hung~ She hung there in the light of the hall waiting to be noticed to be saved a doll tucked under her arm a sad look upon her face broken glass beneath her feet she hung there she waited she said goodbye to the room to the thought...to the doll like a hollow case her body hung a soul far away flying free emerged from her grip... from the hell. |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Whoa...excuse me for sounding weird but this poem kicked ass. lol...I just love it. Most people don't write stuff like this...I'm not saying that they write badly or anything....I'm just saying that this kind of poem is cool to find cuz it's rare. Bravo!  Yours truly, Angel "A man's fate is a man's fate and life is but an illusion." -Shogun ~*Angel of Darkness*~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
Thank you, thank you...I think I blushed when I read your reply....  LOL!!! |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Angel is right this is good, although some don't like the ?? hanging of little girls I don't either, but the expression that this message comes across with is far beyond this simple act of ?? freedom escape, As a once daddy, I can tell you the visualiza of a little girl holding a doll, brings out more maternal protection than I want to put down here, just knowing the atrocities carried out in this day and age to our children, makes me want to run amuck on every bad guy from here to hell. Well that's my ?? thoughts. Joel. I howl a mornful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Ok, thank you for the responses. I do need to let out the fact that the person I describe in the poem is a woman, a woman I knew too closely to not have felt all this so hard. Anyway, I too do not like the thought of children hanging??? or anyone for that matter. You're responses mean so much to me, so thank you for that. |
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DarkAnjl Junior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 17 |
This poem made me feel, made me visualize and moved me deeply. Sorry but this poem ROX!!! Thank you for touching me with your words. Anjl |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Hon I too can understand a message conveyed here but It's not suitable reading material, considering anyone, any age can read this. I'm going to close the thread. If you want to discuss it, email me. isis A heart and soul are not judged by how much you love, but by how much you are loved by others... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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