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StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
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Texas

0 posted 2000-04-05 02:44 AM


I'm putting my life in boxes
filled with burning memories
there are a few happy ones
among the tumultuous churning sea

My first instinct to pack them up
To get away - to hide
but even them I'm quite sure
they'd refuse to be denied

If only I could seal them
could some how conquer the beast
maybe from the darkness
my soul would be released

Starting over once again
but still living in the shadow
is there some way to unlearn
things we wish we didn't know?

I tape the boxes tight and thick
there is no way they can get out
but even through the cardboard
I hear the memories shout




 Mystical being
which makes ink flow
Surround me in
your incandescent glow
Fill my brain with
thoughts and rhyme
As I try to capture
but a moment in time
~Shan~


© Copyright 2000 Shan Crider - All Rights Reserved
JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
1 posted 2000-04-05 03:13 AM


Exactly as you say...we must be using the same boxes.  James
Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
2 posted 2000-04-05 02:36 PM


There is no unlearning, no release, no escape, only the echos of the past, that haunt and, yes change us in ways we may not understand.
Very nice poem you have written.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

3 posted 2000-04-05 03:20 PM


My first instinct to pack them up
To get away - to hide
but even them I'm quite sure
they'd refuse to be denied

If only I could seal them
could some how conquer the beast
maybe from the darkness
my soul would be released
------------------

Starr, this is perfect...what an awesome poem. so honest and emotion pure.
its never easy moving forward...with our shadow ever behind...how well i know...
suberb work in this piece.
take care, jm

 ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces,
you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination...
then you turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart...gave me away.
glass tiger

Broken
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since 2000-03-12
Posts 271
The woods
4 posted 2000-04-05 04:05 PM


Starting over once again
but still living in the shadow
is there some way to unlearn
things we wish we didn't know?
******
I've often wished for this myself, and you say it so well. Great poem! ~Hug~  

StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
5 posted 2000-04-06 02:33 AM


James- I vote we throw away the cardboard and opt for some heavy duty reinfirced steel LOL  

Danny-I havent given up hope that there is a way to unlearn our pasts, or at least learn to deal with them in a more postive light...  

Janet-It's not easy ... but I am going to fina a way out of the shadow ... there has got to be a way ... and if not I will still have the hope that there is  

Broken- I think we all wish this at some point in time  

 Mystical being
which makes ink flow
Surround me in
your incandescent glow
Fill my brain with
thoughts and rhyme
As I try to capture
but a moment in time
~Shan~


Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
6 posted 2000-04-06 05:46 PM


Incredible how some memories of the past keep escaping from there boxes huh ? Great poem Starr !
Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
7 posted 2000-04-06 07:01 PM


And when they escape from the box they always do at the most awful times, when you are trying so hard.......  I know hon.
WOnderful work  

 There is only one corner of the universe you can be certain of improving, and that's your own self...
~Isis~
(Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit)



Irish Rose
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263

8 posted 2000-04-06 10:44 PM


oh, to live in a box, do I know the feeling, very well said !!!

 
Kathleen

Sven
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
9 posted 2000-04-07 12:19 PM


Starr,
      I would say steel encased in concrete!!

This is a wonderful poem, honest and heartfelt. . . I wish that life could be so easily contained sometimes. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Joel the wolf
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since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333
Angels Camp
10 posted 2000-04-07 02:55 AM


I tried to box my world once, What haunts us are the labels.
Thank you, this was good.
Joel.

AVANTI
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
11 posted 2000-04-07 04:16 AM


this is such a  beautiful one...
still i feel memories have a way of catching up on us...so the tape won't do...
simply great work!!!




 If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

StarrGazer
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since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
12 posted 2000-04-07 06:41 AM


Munda- so true  the memories seem to escape when we want them to stay hidden

Isis- thanks it's great to come here and feel that others understand  

Irish Rose- thanks

Avanti- tape I suppose is a temporary soultion maybe I will eventually work up to opening the boxes and dealing with each memory one by one and then they will become lessons learned instead of mistakes and regrets that haunt me  

SEA
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with you
13 posted 2000-04-07 09:49 AM


Starr~ I saw the title to this one yesterday, I had a feeling it would touch me,so I waited. I was right!

"I tape the boxes tight and thick
there is no way they can get out
but even through the cardboard
I hear the memories shout"

This is what got me, what I related to so very well. Loved this poem. -SEA

StarrGazer
Senior Member
since 2000-03-05
Posts 679
Texas
14 posted 2000-04-07 04:37 PM


Thanks SEA I'm not sure where thisone came from it kinda wrote itself on the flap of one of those boxes  

 Mystical being
which makes ink flow
Surround me in
your incandescent glow
Fill my brain with
thoughts and rhyme
As I try to capture
but a moment in time
~Shan~


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